Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Kiri (second nomination)

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Kiri

• Nominated by: Manoof (talk) 13:02, 20 August 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Updated per previous failed review. I'm Back Baby!
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(2 ECs/3 Users/5 Total)

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Support

1. Immi Thrax (talk) 12:46, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
2. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 11:55, 23 August 2021 (UTC)
3. UberSoldat93 (talk) 11:50, 27 August 2021 (UTC)
4. Dentface (talk) 11:58, 28 August 2021 (UTC)
5. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 13:28, 28 August 2021 (UTC)

Object

Immi Thrax

• Hello there! If Kiri's gender has not been revealed, the gendered pronoun "she" should not be used.
  • Good catch, User:Imperators II has fixed it! Manoof (talk) 10:02, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
• Youngling/Legends (as in the age stage) can be linked to. If it doesn't seem right where it's first used ("Jedi youngling"), you could reword to distinguish it from the stage of training.
  • Added thanks! Manoof (talk) 10:02, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
• Since Wolf Clan is the proper name, "the other members of Wolf clan" should capitalize Clan. Immi Thrax (talk) 13:20, 20 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Another one fixed by Imperators II :) Manoof (talk) 10:02, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Dang, he moved fast! Immi Thrax (talk) 12:46, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
      • So fast! Thanks for the review! Manoof (talk) 09:32, 23 August 2021 (UTC)

Braha

• The first two sentences both start with "Kiri was a". I think it'd be better to change that up. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 19:12, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review and I agree, changed it to "They were" Manoof (talk) 09:31, 23 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Further updated to say "The youngling was..." given the mofference on use of they for individuals of unknown gender (Thanks Immi Thrax!) :) Manoof (talk) 11:44, 23 August 2021 (UTC)

CC-8

• Should have a youmay template linking to Kiri Hart
  • Added Manoof (talk) 11:00, 27 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Youmay templates need to be more descriptive. The way I would write this one is something like "this article is about the in-universe Jedi initiate. You may be looking for the real life person Kiri Hart" with all the links added. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 05:37, 28 August 2021 (UTC)
      • It's been a while! lol thanks for that! Manoof (talk) 11:58, 28 August 2021 (UTC)
• Specifying that the CSWE is a Star Wars encyclopedia is redundant. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 03:41, 27 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Removed and added the publisher as I've been advised that's the thing to do these days ;) :) Manoof (talk) 11:00, 27 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Looks like Shay ended up removing it. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 05:37, 28 August 2021 (UTC)

UberSoldat

• Is this character not a Jedi Initiate? UberSoldat93 (talk) 11:33, 27 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments

• Referencing for the last line in BTS doesn't quite sit right. Any suggestion on this (including that it's fine) is most welcome! Manoof (talk) 13:02, 20 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Thanks Imperators II for fixing this up! Manoof (talk) 10:02, 21 August 2021 (UTC)

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 13:29, 28 August 2021 (UTC)