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Kallie Lintra

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Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 12:07, August 27, 2020 (UTC)
Objections handled via Discord. UberSoldat93 (talk) 20:57, August 28, 2020 (UTC)
Sucks to be in this family. RattsT (talk) 23:08, August 28, 2020 (UTC)
That word count is very dangerous. Zed42 (talk) 10:24, September 4, 2020 (UTC)
Ayrehead02 (talk) 10:12, September 13, 2020 (UTC)

~~Tallissan Lintra should be identified as a Resistance member.~~ Fan26 (Talk) 13:52, August 26, 2020 (UTC)
- Added--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 21:19, August 26, 2020 (UTC)

~~Please add the audiobook to Appearances.~~ UberSoldat93 (talk) 08:59, August 27, 2020 (UTC)
- Added--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 10:54, August 27, 2020 (UTC)
~~From reading the part where Kallie appears, you'll have to specify that only the character's starfighter is shown, since it is told from Poe's perspective.~~ UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:17, August 27, 2020 (UTC)
- Done--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 21:12, August 27, 2020 (UTC)
~~Going by the US release date, the audiobook came out on the same day as the novelization, so it's a simultaneous {{1st}} (per Layout Guide).~~ UberSoldat93 (talk) 20:12, August 28, 2020 (UTC)
- Done--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 20:45, August 28, 2020 (UTC)

I get that the film is the same events as the novel's events, but could you link the date note to the novel just to correspond with the appearance section, like "Star Wars: The Rise of Skywalker: The Visual Dictionary dates the events of Star Wars: Episode IX The Rise of Skywalker, and subsequently the events of Star Wars: The Rise of Skywalker: A Junior Novel to one year after the events of Star Wars: Episode VII The Force Awakens." Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 10:01, August 27, 2020 (UTC)
- Changed--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 10:54, August 27, 2020 (UTC)

~~I think it's relevant to state that her sister was from Pippip 3 where she lived on a farm with their parents.~~ Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:51, August 30, 2020 (UTC)
- Added--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 09:24, August 30, 2020 (UTC)
Since you introduce and describe the Resistance further down, mentioning it twice in the first sentence is confusing. Instead, I'd start the second sentence with "both sisters were members of the Resistance".Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:51, August 30, 2020 (UTC)
- Changed--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 09:24, August 30, 2020 (UTC)
The second sentence says that she'd participated in the Battle of Exegol by 35 ABY, but it's better to say it was specifically in 35 ABY. I'd just remove the by 35 ABY bit and instead include the date with the battle, since its then still shown she'd joined the Resisance by then. Ayrehead02 (talk) 08:51, August 30, 2020 (UTC)
- Changed--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 09:24, August 30, 2020 (UTC)

"Both Kallie and her sister Tallissan were part of the Resistance, a paramilitary group led by former New Republic senator Leia Organa," Is that supposed to be the end of the sentence, or is something missing after the comma?
- That was supposed to be the end--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 10:47, August 31, 2020 (UTC)
"…Lintra perished during the battle after she destroyed three of the eight TIE fighters that surrounded her A-wing starfighter." I think those events would be better presented chronologically, with her being surrounded, destroying the fighters and then being killed. Zed42 (talk) 09:13, August 31, 2020 (UTC)
- Changed--DarthRuiz30 (talk) 10:47, August 31, 2020 (UTC)

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 10:34, September 13, 2020 (UTC)