Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Kalandra

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Kalandra

• Nominated by: Immi Thrax (talk) 21:04, 18 August 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Since Aphra is a disaster lesbian and Kalandra is one of her exes, this makes Kalandra a disaster-by-association
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Support

1. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 14:19, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
2. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 02:35, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
3. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 03:35, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
4. OOM 224 17:26, 26 August 2021 (UTC)

Object

Spooky

• Mind adding a touch more context for Aphra?—spookywilloww^talk 01:29, 19 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Sure--what sort are you thinking? I don't know which direction to go in context-wise. Immi Thrax (talk) 07:29, 19 August 2021 (UTC)
    • She could be established as "the human Chelli Lona Aphra", or introduced as an archaeology student herself instead of clarifying that about her and Starros later on, which would move the link up. Either would work —spookywilloww^talk 13:42, 19 August 2021 (UTC)
      • Have a look! Immi Thrax (talk) 13:58, 19 August 2021 (UTC)

Luca

• I'm not convinced with the wording of the sentence:"that Chelli Lona Aphra, a human female aspiring to become an archaeologist, had during the Imperial Era", the fact that you give the information in the middle makes the sentence difficult to understand, in my opinion. I'd reword it: "that the human female aspiring archaeologist, Chelli Lona Aphra had during the Imperial Era". What do you think?
  • Take a look! Immi Thrax (talk) 13:07, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Looks good, I've made a copy-edit, though. Feel free to revert it if you think it doesn't work. —Unsigned comment by LucaRoR (talk • contribs)
• I think the article could use a paragraph break. Otherwise: it's a very good article! LucaRoR ^(Talk) 12:52, 21 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Done, and thank you! Immi Thrax (talk) 13:07, 21 August 2021 (UTC)

OOM

• The first sentence is a bit of a mouthful. Can you see if that can be improved? OOM 224 21:03, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Revised and split into separate sentences. Thanks! Immi Thrax (talk) 05:03, 26 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Excellent, and you're welcome! OOM 224 17:26, 26 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 17:26, 26 August 2021 (UTC)