Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Jay's Padawan lightsaber

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Jay's Padawan lightsaber

• Nominated by: YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 20:01, 11 October 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Featured Topic: Jay?
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Support

1. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 11:34, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
2. Dentface (talk) 22:16, 1 November 2021 (UTC)

Object

Luca

• Kyber crystal, single-bladed, music, and Jedi Order are infobox exclusive.
  • Haven't added kyber crystal to the body yet, but WP:LG#Infobox says organizations implicit with a role aren't required to be in the body. "Imperial Officer Corps does not need to be linked in the article body if the article states that the subject is an Imperial officer". I would argue the same applies for "Jedi Order"
    • Oh, right. I had forgotten about that, sorry. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 18:22, 12 October 2021 (UTC)
  • I did it. Kyber crystal linked in body. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 22:19, 12 October 2021 (UTC)
• Weapon could be linked.
  • Done.--YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 20:46, 11 October 2021 (UTC)
• Context for Boba Fett and Jabba?
  • Done.--YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 20:46, 11 October 2021 (UTC)
• (reviewing note): Tomorrow (probably) I'll create a page about "microphone" that you could link. Also, word-count is 162, addressing my objections will most likely push it above. If you section it, remeber to remove the |notoc=1 that I've added in the {{Top}}. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 20:17, 11 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Added. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 18:22, 12 October 2021 (UTC)
• Is the 3rd reference really necessary?
  • For the fact he was a former Padawan? I suppose not. Is that the one you're referring to? -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 18:40, 13 October 2021 (UTC)
    • I removed that. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 20:45, 13 October 2021 (UTC)
• I would give a date to the events described.
  • We don't really know the date very well. :( -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 18:40, 13 October 2021 (UTC)
• "only for his lightsaber to fail and spark." It is possibly just me, but I'd suggest a bit of rewording with this sentence… It is a bit confusing, in my opinion. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 18:36, 13 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Changed it from "fail and spark" to "fail to ignite". -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 18:40, 13 October 2021 (UTC)

UberSoldat

• Please use Jabba's full name upon first mention. The rules specifically say not to deliberately reduce the word count if the article approaches a limit. UberSoldat93 (talk) 08:01, 12 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Done. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 17:01, 12 October 2021 (UTC)

Dent

• Maybe give a year for when the lightsaber was damaged? Pretty easy to cite since it's Order 66. Dentface (talk) 23:10, 31 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Good point. Done. YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 00:53, 1 November 2021 (UTC)

CC-8

• The second sentence could be a little clearer on whether Jay or the lightsaber fell into Geezer's vehicle.
  • They both fell. Is the phrasing better? -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 22:41, 3 November 2021 (UTC)
• Order 66 could use some additional context Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 09:17, 3 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Done. -- YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 22:41, 3 November 2021 (UTC)
• I checked Tatooine Rhapsody again and it looks like Jay uses the lightsaber in every performance in the episode.
  • Indeed. However, is every performance specifically notable on the article beyond using it to make music? — YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 09:10, 4 November 2021 (UTC)
    • Could just specify that he used it during the band's performances and that he used it in the performance after he was questioned about it Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 00:45, 5 November 2021 (UTC)
      • Better, or more tweaking needed? — YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 01:44, 5 November 2021 (UTC)
        • I just think it needs to be specified that he used the microphone in that performance at the end, even though it's going to push the body past 165 words. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 23:38, 5 November 2021 (UTC)
• A category about it being a microphone would be appropriate, but I'm not sure what would work
  • I don’t know of any other microphones notable for articles, but if we can find any, I’ll make and add the category. As far as individual musical instruments, I think that category might also be appropriate if it exists. — YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 09:10, 4 November 2021 (UTC)
    • Microphones don't really count as musical instruments, I think the best solution is to create a new category for audio equipment, which can be a subcategory of Category:Communications. Happy to create this one if you like. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 00:45, 5 November 2021 (UTC)
      • That would be great; thank you. — YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 01:44, 5 November 2021 (UTC)
• It should be possible to upload an image that just focuses on the lightsaber while still meeting the 400px requirement Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 05:59, 4 November 2021 (UTC)

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