Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Jagged Fel's secretary (second nomination)

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Jagged Fel's secretary (second nomination)

• Nominated by: Dentface (talk) 21:58, 14 November 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:
• WookieeProject (optional): WP:LE, WP:NOVELS

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Support

1. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 18:28, 17 November 2021 (UTC)
2. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 06:40, 19 November 2021 (UTC)
3. Supreme Emperor ^Holocomm 20:58, 20 November 2021 (UTC)
4. OOM 224 17:42, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

Object

Luca

• Is the ABY date self-sourcing?
  • It wasn't. Fixed. Dentface (talk) 21:44, 16 November 2021 (UTC)
• I think that "Tell her that I expected her six seconds ago." should be somehow implemented in the body. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 16:12, 16 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Got the second one here in my copy edit. Supreme Emperor ^Holocomm 16:21, 16 November 2021 (UTC)
• I don't think House of Solo should be pipelinked in Jedi Solo, I didn't remove it myself because I'm not sure if we have precedents. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 17:53, 17 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Done. Thanks! Dentface (talk) 02:56, 18 November 2021 (UTC)

SE

• Only thing from me, can you tweak this sentence a bit? It comes across as though she's the secretary's fiancee rather than Fel's. "the secretary was working in Fel's office when his fiancée, Jedi Knight Jaina Solo, came to visit him". Supreme Emperor ^Holocomm 16:24, 16 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Done. Dentface (talk) 21:44, 16 November 2021 (UTC)

Macaroni

• Only the release year is necessary in the bts. This isn't the first time I've had to point this out, so I suggest you familiarize yourself with WP:LG#Publication dates. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 16:28, 16 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Fixed. Sorry about that. Won't happen again. Dentface (talk) 21:44, 16 November 2021 (UTC)

OOM

• "the Offices of the Imperial Head of State" — the sentence is pretty long-winded, so I suggest changing this to "the latter's offices"
• Unless TERC mentions Jaina's visit to Fel's office in 44 ABY, the ref note will need to be expanded to say that the sources dates the events of the novel to that year (example).
• No need to mention "briefly" in the BTS; that seems to be an old practice that's now been overturned. OOM 224 17:45, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
  • Done. Dentface (talk) 01:47, 22 November 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 17:42, 22 November 2021 (UTC)