Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Imperial scout post

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The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a Comprehensive article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Imperial scout post

  • Nominated by: TK-462 (talk) 19:10, May 3, 2020 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments:

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Ben
  • 'Skeleton crew' (the term they use in the novel) means the minimum crew needed. Undermanned suggests more are required.
  • You should mention the presence of speeders.
    • In the book, it states that "Brand had announced her intent to ambush any Imperials looking to flee or outflank their attackers on speeder bikes." Just based off of this, I don't feel that it would be necessary to add that, simply because there is no mention of speeder bikes actually being involved, just a single rebel trooper providing a little protection against the possibility. If I'm mistaken, I'm happy to add it in, I just wanted to check. TK-462 (talk) 01:47, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
      • It also states at the end of the battle that Zab wanted to steal speeder bikes there, which Namir stopped as they may have been rigged with homing beacons. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 08:40, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
        • Oh, got it. I added this as well. TK-462 (talk) 18:22, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
          • Ok, I would only mention that Namir suspected the beacons in the speeders in the History as it's not confirmed. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 07:12, May 5, 2020 (UTC)
  • "Immediately after the battle, the soldiers of the Sixty-First detonated the remaining supplies that had not been destroyed and left the short-lived battlefield." Ok this I think needs some rewording. Firstly, "the soldiers" or "the two squads" is simpler to say seeing as we already know they're from the Sixty-First. Secondly, "remaining supplies" suggests that some had already been destroyed, it's also described as "equipment." Finally I would recommend saying that they "fled into the jungle" as we don't know a lot about the state of the scout post really in my opinion. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 21:12, May 3, 2020 (UTC)
    • Fixed the above, except the comment on the second objection. TK-462 (talk) 02:01, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
  • The novel says that the squads fled into the jungle to avoid the inevitable "TIE bomber" reinforcements, please implement this. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 08:40, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
Anil
  • Majority of the links in the article does not comply with our Manual of Style. Please read this section and change it accordingly.
    • I changed all the OOU book links to comply with the manual, but I didn't see any others. Am I missing anything? Excuse my ignorance, and thanks for your help. TK-462 (talk) 02:01, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
      • The remaining problems are related to the formatting of the links. Per those instructions, [[Star Wars: Galactic Atlas|''Star Wars: Galactic Atlas'']] should be replaced with ''[[Star Wars: Galactic Atlas]]'' and [[Soldier|soldiers]] should be formatted as [[soldier]]s, for example. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 20:03, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
        • Okay, I totally misread the italics section. Should be fixed now. TK-462 (talk) 00:50, May 5, 2020 (UTC)
          • You've fixed most of them and I've taken care of the ones you missed in my copy-edit. Please take a look at the changes and feel free to ask me the reasoning of the changes that you don't understand. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:15, May 5, 2020 (UTC)
            • Wonderful, thank you. You totally cleared it up for me, I'll keep it in mind going forward. TK-462 (talk) 01:25, May 5, 2020 (UTC)
  • I think you can combine the two date references into a single reference note. It would look much cleaner.
  • The date note that's used to source the destruction date in the infobox does not mention the destruction of the post at all.
  • Since we don't know the exact date, I believe you should say that the post was built around 3 ABY, as the section of the book that states the post was newly built is set in 3 ABY, and the base may very well have been built in 2 ABY. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 01:23, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
    • Fixed the above date and reference issues. TK-462 (talk) 02:01, May 4, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Braha'tok enthusiast
  • Just a couple things to point out. The novel doesn't call it by the article's name so is therefore conjectural. The other squad was Zab's, Fektrin did not even appear in that section. Make sure to finish explaining the date of the campaign in the note before going straight to dating the construction, and source that note to all dates. Those three were quick minor changes luckily so I sorted them in my copy-edit for you. Braha'tok enthusiast (Hello there) 21:12, May 3, 2020 (UTC)
    • Great, thank you! TK-462 (talk) 02:04, May 4, 2020 (UTC)
UberSoldat
  • Article is at 259 words, above the CAN word limit. UberSoldat93 ClanMudhornSignet-Redemption (talk) 08:30, May 5, 2020 (UTC)
  • Now that the article is above 250 words, any EC has the go-ahead to fail it. I'll nominiate it as a GA once I get one completed, as I'm currently at the limit. Thank you! TK-462 (talk) 14:10, May 5, 2020 (UTC)
  • Archiving per nominator request. Tommy-Macaroni 14:38, May 6, 2020 (UTC)