Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Hutt Aviation Authority

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Hutt Aviation Authority

• Nominated by: TK-462 (talk) 19:44, October 4, 2020 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:

(2 ECs/3 Users/5 Total)

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Support

1. LordMominutiae (talk) 23:04, October 4, 2020 (UTC)
2. <-Omicron^{(Leave a message at the BEEP!)} 21:01, October 7, 2020 (UTC)
3. Great work - - -OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 14:27, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
4. QuiGonJinn ^(Talk) 13:55, October 13, 2020 (UTC)
5. UberSoldat93 (talk) 18:44, October 13, 2020 (UTC)

Object

Braha'tok enthusiast

• "In 22 BBY, while in the Fleet Support Air Station on the Outer Rim planet Ord Mantell, clone commando RC-1309 made note of the HAA's reputation for low standards when certifying aircraft." I think it'd be better to mention the reputation first and then say that RC made a note of it while at the Fleet Support in 22 BBY. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 13:43, October 11, 2020 (UTC)
  • Good point, thank you. I've adjusted the wording. TK-462 (talk) 17:43, October 11, 2020 (UTC)
    • I've made some further adjustments for you. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 17:57, October 11, 2020 (UTC)
• The organisation's founding is infobox exclusive. Note that if it's not stated to have previously been founded (or formed etc) in the novel, you don't need to give it a founding date. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{(Hello there)} 17:57, October 11, 2020 (UTC)
  • Understood, I've removed it. TK-462 (talk) 18:00, October 11, 2020 (UTC)

OOM

• The infobox date can't just be cited to the novel. Also, does the novel actually say the HAA was founded before the first year of the Clone Wars? If not, then the date should be changed to "By 22 BBY."
• (Reviewing note) Per the MOS, "Links should only be added in quote attributions and image captions if the subject is not linked in the article body already."
• (Reviewing note) Changed "in the Fleet Support Air Station" to "at the Fleet Support Air Station," and the {{Top}} template from "{{Top|type=legends}}" to "{{Top|imp}}" - - -OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 18:04, October 11, 2020 (UTC)
  • Understood, thanks! TK-462 (talk) 18:06, October 11, 2020 (UTC)
• No problem! I'm to understand that the HAA was mentioned while the clones were examining some ship(s). If so, the article could benefit from giving context on the ship's model and state. - - -OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 18:14, October 11, 2020 (UTC)
  • Makes sense, I've added it now. TK-462 (talk) 00:49, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
• 22 BBY should be mentioned in the sentence "This was made note of by […]" instead. - - -OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 05:14, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
  • My bad, fixed. TK-462 (talk) 12:16, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
• One last thing: the last sentence is a run-on. Another comma/reorganisation would be nice. - - -OOM 224 ༼༽^{talk}༼༽ 12:57, October 12, 2020 (UTC)
  • How does that look? TK-462 (talk) 13:06, October 12, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 12:18, October 15, 2020 (UTC)