Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Griph

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Griph

(2 ECs/3 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. UberSoldat93 (talk) 14:07, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
  2. ECvote TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 19:19, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
  3. Zed42 (talk) 20:26, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
  4. —spookywillowwtalk 02:42, January 2, 2020 (UTC)
  5. ECvote Fan26 (Talk) 17:49, January 4, 2020 (UTC)

Object

UberSoldat
  • Grammatical errors here, "...leaving the his lover behind on her own.", and here, "He wore gold and maroon colored shirt". UberSoldat93 (talk) 11:25, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
  • The word "a" is not a suitable link for another character when the word "girl" is present. Also, change the wording used when referring to the girl e.g. Avoid stuff like "His lover". UberSoldat93 (talk) 11:25, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
  • There's a redirect link in the BTS section. If you haven't ticked "Highlight all redirects orange." in Preferences (under the Gadgets tab) yet, I suggest you do so. UberSoldat93 (talk) 11:25, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
    • All addressed. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 13:51, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
      • Still left this one out, "...leaving the his lover behind on her own." UberSoldat93 (talk) 13:59, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
      • Also I just noticed this but if an article doesn't have a Legends variant, there is no need to mention the word "canon" in the BTS. UberSoldat93 (talk) 13:59, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
Zed
  • The comic doesn't mention the plot to assassinate Padmé Amidala, and it'd probably be simpler to just use the date of 22 BBY as a reference point instead. Zed42 (talk) 11:37, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
  • "His lover had ran away from her father and join the Black Sun." Aside from the grammatical error, this isn't entirely correct. The Twi'lek wanted to run away with Griph, but never managed to do so. Additionally, the comic seems to imply that the Twi'lek did not specifically intend to join Black Sun, as Griph introduces his uncle's affiliation with Black Sun to her during their meeting.
  • You can probably specify that the hunter who told Griph to leave was Neelda. Zed42 (talk) 12:12, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
    • All of them done. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 13:51, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
      • You'll have to explain the date ref a little more. Rather than specifically mentioning the assassination plot, maybe just state that it must occur before the events of Episode II due to Jango Fett's death in that movie, and then give the date of the movie's events as 22 BBY. Zed42 (talk) 15:33, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
  • The mention of the bounty hunter mission should be expanded upon. They were hired by the girl's father to return her home, not just capture her. Zed42 (talk) 15:33, December 30, 2019 (UTC)
Spooky
Anil
  • The context given for Ord Mantell looks excessive to me. Just saying that it was a planet should suffice.
  • (Reviewing note) Per our Manual of Style, articles shall use the serial comma as standard. I've fixed this for you, but please keep this in mind for your future nominations.
  • (Reviewing note) Manual reference notes should be as brief as possible. Since Galactic Atlas directly dates Jango Fett's death to 22 BBY, there is no need to mention Attack of the Clones. TanDivoInsignia-SenateMurders Anıl Şerifoğlu (talk) 18:20, December 30, 2019 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 16:01, January 6, 2020 (UTC)