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Grillig juice

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  1. ECvote JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 03:14, 25 October 2022 (UTC)
  2. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 18:51, 25 October 2022 (UTC)
  3. ECvote Commander Code-8 Hello There! 05:41, 28 October 2022 (UTC)
  4. ECvote Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 13:08, 29 October 2022 (UTC)

Object

Samonic
  • Please rearrange your paragraphs, the paragraph break produces an extremely short paragraph. I'd recommend a paragraph break dividing the juice's initial description and the "Around 19 BBY" bit.
  • Missing link to diet, youngling.
  • Uh, GG takes place around 18 BBY, not 19 BBY. :P Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 13:13, 13 October 2022 (UTC)
    • fixed BloodOfIrizi Sabine Starbird (talk) 17:42, 13 October 2022 (UTC)
      • Later that year can be changed into something like "some weeks afterward," as LE takes place weeks after its prequel. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 11:05, 17 October 2022 (UTC)
      • done BloodOfIrizi Sabine Starbird (talk) 15:58, 17 October 2022 (UTC)
  • I see nothing stating LE takes place weeks after GG in LE. I only see statements saying that the attack on Csilla depicted in CR took place last year, for example. Can you share what you're referring to? Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 11:01, 25 October 2022 (UTC)
    • sorry, i wrote that on the wrong article lmao. reworded BloodOfIrizi Sabine Starbird (talk) 15:33, 25 October 2022 (UTC)
      • I'd rather you say "around the same year" and use the normal LE datenote. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 18:24, 25 October 2022 (UTC)
Macaroni
  • The second date note doesn't mention anything about weeks; if Lesser Evil itself gives that time range, the extra ref isn't even necessary. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 17:21, 20 October 2022 (UTC)
    • LE does mention, date note removed BloodOfIrizi Sabine Starbird (talk) 20:59, 20 October 2022 (UTC)
  • Just checked both books, and LE uses "grillig juice" (un-hyphenated and un-capitalized throughout), while GG's only mention of the juice is preceding another noun, so the hyphen there is grammatical (also un-capitalized there). You should therefore move this page to "grillig juice" and de-capitalize "grillig" throughout the article. JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 18:18, 24 October 2022 (UTC)
Manoof
  • Since Lesser Evil came after Greater Good, can we phrase that Che'ri drank the juice at Ardok ranch later that same year to more clearly show the sequence of the two events. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:48, 29 October 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 13:09, 29 October 2022 (UTC)