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Grievous's mother
- Nominated by: Editoronthewiki (talk) 05:32, 13 March 2021 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: I thought it would be funny if I CANed the page I tried to have deleted
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Support
OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 23:01, 17 March 2021 (UTC)- Commander Code-8 Hello There! 11:29, 4 April 2021 (UTC)
- Supreme Emperor (talk) 19:49, 4 April 2021 (UTC)
- UberSoldat93
(talk) 06:55, 5 April 2021 (UTC)
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OOM
You can add Category:Individuals of unspecified species to articles such as this one.- done Editoronthewiki (talk) 13:41, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
Please revise the Behind the scenes per Wookieepedia:Layout Guide#Publication dates. Also, there's no need for the word "first" there since it's the only source in which the subject is mentioned.OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 08:47, 14 March 2021 (UTC)- Good? Editoronthewiki (talk) 13:43, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
Can the words "who was born on" really be sourced to Star Wars Journeys: Beginnings?- Fixed Editoronthewiki (talk) 19:14, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
Also, does any source say that Grievous was born on Kalee? One's homeworld is not necessarily their place of birth.- Star Wars: The Complete Visual Dictionary, New Edition says Grievous was a "warlord from the planet Kalee" but that's all I can find Editoronthewiki (talk) 03:24, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
- That's a better wording. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 23:27, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
- Should I use that to say he was born there? Editoronthewiki (talk) 23:46, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
- That's a better wording. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 23:27, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
- Star Wars: The Complete Visual Dictionary, New Edition says Grievous was a "warlord from the planet Kalee" but that's all I can find Editoronthewiki (talk) 03:24, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
"He chose to undergo drastic cybernetic upgrades over time and after surviving a nearly-fatal shuttle crash." doesn't really make sense to me.OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 17:17, 15 March 2021 (UTC)- He had begun to replace his flesh with cybernetics over time, then he suffered a shuttle crash and continued to Editoronthewiki (talk) 19:16, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
- Okay, but the sentence in the article isn't very clear and does not make grammatical sense.
- Better? Editoronthewiki (talk) 23:51, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
- Okay, but the sentence in the article isn't very clear and does not make grammatical sense.
- He had begun to replace his flesh with cybernetics over time, then he suffered a shuttle crash and continued to Editoronthewiki (talk) 19:16, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
"Although" is preferred over "though" in formal writing.- Done Editoronthewiki (talk) 23:46, 16 March 2021 (UTC)
Is using all these refs the only way? An article should have as little refs as possible, so it would be better if you could find a source that encompasses information that is currently split between multiple refs.OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 23:27, 16 March 2021 (UTC)- There do not seem to be any canon sources that can be used to limit the number, unless you want the "in wild space" portion removed. Should note that Numa's father does not include region Editoronthewiki (talk) 01:11, 17 March 2021 (UTC)
- Alright then. In this context I think mentioning Wild Space is unnecessary, not for the sake of reducing ref notes but because the context isn't really relevant. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 08:18, 17 March 2021 (UTC)
- removed Editoronthewiki (talk) 22:49, 17 March 2021 (UTC)
- Alright then. In this context I think mentioning Wild Space is unnecessary, not for the sake of reducing ref notes but because the context isn't really relevant. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 08:18, 17 March 2021 (UTC)
- There do not seem to be any canon sources that can be used to limit the number, unless you want the "in wild space" portion removed. Should note that Numa's father does not include region Editoronthewiki (talk) 01:11, 17 March 2021 (UTC)
Erebus
Publisher missing from BTS.- I've been informed that this is not necessary.
- I've been informed that this is not necessary.
CC-8
Missing a link to Grievous's family in the body.- good? --Editoronthewiki (talk) 13:38, 2 April 2021 (UTC)
Can link Parent somewhere.Commander Code-8 Hello There! 01:31, 2 April 2021 (UTC)- parent is linked to Editoronthewiki (talk) 13:33, 2 April 2021 (UTC)
Comments
Yes, I see the red link, that will be made soon.--Editoronthewiki (talk) 05:38, 13 March 2021 (UTC)- Page made Editoronthewiki (talk) 19:36, 13 March 2021 (UTC)
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 07:02, 5 April 2021 (UTC)