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Dagobah Slug Syrup
- Nominated by: Immi Thrax (talk) 23:55, 10 February 2021 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: For WookieeProject Galaxy's Edge
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Support
Eassy EC'ss ssupports OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 07:52, 1 March 2021 (UTC)- Good work. Hope to see more from you. UberSoldat93
(talk) 15:04, 5 March 2021 (UTC) - As Shay said, hope to see more from you in the future. ~ D MCCG
(chat) 15:07, 5 March 2021 (UTC) - Nice work on your first CA. And per above, I hope to see more nominations of yours.
- Well done! JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 16:14, 5 March 2021 (UTC)
Object
Macaroni
I'm not sure that "repugnant" is exactly keeping it to a NPOV. Can you change that wording?JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 00:12, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- Changed! Though it's Tuggs' fault: "Sometimes the sweetest things come in the most repulsive packages. I'm livin' proof of that. Another critter that tends to get dismissed on account of its appearance is the Dagobah swamp slug." Guess he had some emotions about it! Immi Thrax (talk) 00:30, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- Fair enough! JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 00:31, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- Fair enough! JediMasterMacaroni
- Changed! Though it's Tuggs' fault: "Sometimes the sweetest things come in the most repulsive packages. I'm livin' proof of that. Another critter that tends to get dismissed on account of its appearance is the Dagobah swamp slug." Guess he had some emotions about it! Immi Thrax (talk) 00:30, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat
The link to slime can be added to the introductory sentence.- Done! Immi Thrax (talk) 07:49, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
You need to establish context for Dagobah after mentioning the swamp slugs.- How's that, or not enough? Immi Thrax (talk) 07:49, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- Good enough. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:53, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- Good enough. UberSoldat93
- How's that, or not enough? Immi Thrax (talk) 07:49, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
I'd say "unusually sugary taste" also falls under WP:NPOV. Please reword.- Tuggs strikes again! I edited to reflect a quote from him ("The sticky secretions that swamp slugs leave in their wake are unusually saccharine"), but if that still isn't working for NPOV, I'll just chop it. Immi Thrax (talk) 07:49, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- That's better. UberSoldat93 (talk) 07:53, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- That's better. UberSoldat93
- Tuggs strikes again! I edited to reflect a quote from him ("The sticky secretions that swamp slugs leave in their wake are unusually saccharine"), but if that still isn't working for NPOV, I'll just chop it. Immi Thrax (talk) 07:49, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
I'm not seeing the connection between the syrup and two listed dishes, since the article talks about the "slime" being used and not the syrupUberSoldat93 (talk) 07:01, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- Oh, nice catch! Rearranged to specify the syrup is an ingredient in Tuggs' recipes for the drinks. Immi Thrax (talk) 07:49, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
Erebus
The paragraph is a bit long. Please split it into two separate paragraphs.- Done! Immi Thrax (talk) 19:40, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
- Much better!
- Much better!
- Done! Immi Thrax (talk) 19:40, 11 February 2021 (UTC)
OOM
Could use some pipelinks to Standard day, time, and sexes. Also, the infobox should be in past tense.OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 19:07, 26 February 2021 (UTC)- Done! I think. Immi Thrax (talk) 00:15, 27 February 2021 (UTC)
- Great! I've also added a few more links.
- Thanks! I don't think to pipelink all that stuff myself :) Also, that is very weird about the missing Dagobah-Schneckensirup! I looked again and found it's on one version of Jedipedia, but not the other that the Interlang points to. I don't know of a solution. Immi Thrax (talk) 10:13, 27 February 2021 (UTC)
- Replying to myself: oh yeah, could create the article on the right one with some translation guidance or ask a German speaker for help! Immi Thrax (talk) 10:40, 27 February 2021 (UTC)
- Yeah, I've removed the de interlang since Wookieepedia only supports Jedipedia.net and not the copy-cat fandom.com site. IIRC, that's because the Jedipedia community had decided to leave Wikia (now FANDOM)
- Replying to myself: oh yeah, could create the article on the right one with some translation guidance or ask a German speaker for help! Immi Thrax (talk) 10:40, 27 February 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks! I don't think to pipelink all that stuff myself :) Also, that is very weird about the missing Dagobah-Schneckensirup! I looked again and found it's on one version of Jedipedia, but not the other that the Interlang points to. I don't know of a solution. Immi Thrax (talk) 10:13, 27 February 2021 (UTC)
- Great! I've also added a few more links.
- Done! I think. Immi Thrax (talk) 00:15, 27 February 2021 (UTC)
The article could use a description of the syrup's appearance.OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 08:11, 27 February 2021 (UTC)- Done, though I only described the syrup itself, not the fancy presentation seen in the photo. Immi Thrax (talk) 10:13, 27 February 2021 (UTC)
- Of course. The information in the infobox should be added to the article body as well. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 11:57, 27 February 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks for the catch! Done. Immi Thrax (talk) 13:33, 27 February 2021 (UTC)
- Of course. The information in the infobox should be added to the article body as well. OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 11:57, 27 February 2021 (UTC)
- Done, though I only described the syrup itself, not the fancy presentation seen in the photo. Immi Thrax (talk) 10:13, 27 February 2021 (UTC)
Any specifics on how Dagobah Slug Syrup was used in the two cocktails?OOM 224 ༼༽talk༼༽ 14:16, 27 February 2021 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 16:23, 5 March 2021 (UTC)