Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Cassa Hun

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Cassa Hun

(1 ECs/2 Users/3 Total)

Support

  1. ECvote 501st dogma(talk) 01:10, January 29, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 06:26, February 6, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Winterz (talk) 14:14, February 13, 2013 (UTC)

Object

  1. CC-8
    • Missing P&T. Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 22:06, January 28, 2013 (UTC)
      • Done. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 00:45, January 29, 2013 (UTC)
        • The section's good but does the game say he's devoted? Sounds POVish to me. Commander Code-8 G'day, mate 01:11, January 29, 2013 (UTC)
          • Removed. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 01:25, January 29, 2013 (UTC)
            • Just a heads-up, CC (and Cade). Cade could have dismissed this objection because when articles are this small, that sort of sectionizing is absolutely unnecessary and the writer can mention those physical attributes well in the Biography. —Unsigned comment by Winterz (talk • contribs)
              • Guys, I did not write the above comment. Stake black msg 16:28, February 7, 2013 (UTC)
  2. Winterz goes shopping
    • The Hero of Tython isn't linked in the article, sir.
      • Done.
    • I'm not entirely sure about this, but you should probably move the "(...) the Jedi Master gave the Jedi armor or an additional lightsaber depending on the Knight's choice" to the Bts section, and correct the Jedi armor part as it's confusing. Did he give the Jedi, an armor or did he give The Jedi armor to the Jedi? Winterz (talk) 14:45, February 5, 2013 (UTC)
  3. More shopping (there was a sale)
    • Jedi Order is in the infobox and intro but is missing from the article body.
    • Even if he only speaks to the player on Carrick Station, is he not still canonically on Coruscant at some point?
    • A bit more detail on just what his tutelage of the Hero entails is in order. The intro could and should briefly relate something from his biography (him being on Carrick Station). The article reads very rushed, as if it were written to be under 250 words rather than with a sufficient amount of detail. Currently, it seems like you're writing articles with the ultimate goal being to CAN them and not GAN them. Your ultimate goal should instead be to give the articles an appropriate amount of detail; whether they're CA or GA length should be incidental to that goal. Menkooroo (talk) 16:28, February 12, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

  1. Is there a reason why one of the quotes is repeated? (last sentence of quote in bio and P&T's one) 501st dogma(talk) 00:52, January 29, 2013 (UTC)
    • Because he has like three lines. Fixed. Cade Calrayn GalacticRepublicEmblem-Traced-TORkit 00:57, January 29, 2013 (UTC)