Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/CF-8011

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CF-8011

• Nominated by: Liverpool92 03:09, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Another nom from 709th Legion personnel category
• WookieeProject (optional): WP:GE

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Support

1. UberSoldat93 (talk) 16:53, 8 October 2021 (UTC)
2. YakovChaimTzvi (he/him/his) (talk) 18:37, 10 October 2021 (UTC)
3. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 15:01, 12 October 2021 (UTC)
4. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 10:00, 15 October 2021 (UTC)
5. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 06:17, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
6. OOM 224 08:07, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Object

UberSoldat

• Precedent is to cite all Datapad screenshots together. UberSoldat93 (talk) 19:02, 2 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Fixed.-Liverpool92 02:31, 8 October 2021 (UTC)

Macaroni

• "commented that it was not any wonder the stormtrooper's stuff repeatedly gets stolen" -- this needs to use past tense. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 15:04, 6 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Fixed.--Liverpool92 02:31, 8 October 2021 (UTC)

Manoof

• BTS notes RS-318? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:32, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Fixed.-Liverpool92 17:05, 11 October 2021 (UTC)
• You use the pronoun "he" twice, the second one is linked. Both usages are ambiguous as it could refer to the troopers or Ren. Understand the trooper doesn't have an established gender but that COULD be introducing they're male. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:32, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Got rid of the second one but I don't see the problem with the first one. The datapad refers to Ren as he.--Liverpool92 17:05, 11 October 2021 (UTC)
• There's 6 commas in the second sentence, can that be rephrased? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:32, 9 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Fixed.--Liverpool92 02:08, 15 October 2021 (UTC)

OOM

• Informal words should ideally be left out of an article's prose, and it's always good not to repeat the wording of sources, so "antsy" should be replaced by another word. OOM 224 11:31, 15 October 2021 (UTC)
  • Fixed.--Liverpool92 02:08, 17 October 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 08:07, 17 October 2021 (UTC)