Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/C-9PO (Rhommamool)

The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a Comprehensive article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

C-9PO (Rhommamool)

• Nominated by: — Samonic 08:59, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: I hate droids too, Nom Anor.
• WookieeProject (optional): The New Jedi Order, Novels

(3 ECs/2 Users/5 Total)

(Votes required: No additional votes required to pass, please consider reviewing another article.)

Support

1. ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 00:29, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
2. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 01:52, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
3. Good work handling the objections. OOM 224 13:08, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
4. Assuming Fan's objection is addressed. Imperators II^(Talk) 20:53, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
5. Hadn't realized Fan had a pending objection. Well, extra support vote for you :P LucaRoR ^(Talk) 16:46, 14 May 2022 (UTC)

Object

ThrawnChiss

• "In 25 ABY, after 9PO observed the Red Knights of Life, a group made of followers of the Yuuzhan Vong Nom Anor, which enforced the destruction of all machines, as his species held a hatred for machines."- what happened after he observed them? -ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 12:24, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
  • This: "The Knights found the wandering droid and took it to the Square of Hopeful Redemption, there..." Also, when adding objections/comments, add * before them, so you're aware :) — Samonic 12:51, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Shouldn't they be part of the same sentence? -ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 13:51, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
      • Better? — Samonic 17:06, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
        • Thanks for fixing it. -ThrawnChiss7 (talk) 00:29, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
          • My pleasure :)

Fan

• That second-to-last sentence is way too long. Fan26 (Talk) 15:39, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Better? — Samonic 17:06, 23 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Please break it up further, the droid obeserving these knights and the knights capturing it don't have to be the same sentence. Fan26 (Talk) 19:44, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
      • Addressed.— Samonic 07:31, 25 April 2022 (UTC)
        • Please reread these sentences; some of them now don't make any sense and are a little choppy. Fan26 (Talk) 20:06, 2 May 2022 (UTC)
          • Has the article improved? — Samonic 16:04, 3 May 2022 (UTC)
            • "There, the droid was destroyed by being thrown from a great height into a pile of metal by the followers" this can be tidied up; say that the followers destryoed the droid by throwing it from a great height into the metal pile. Fan26 (Talk) 20:33, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
              • Done.— Samonic 21:17, 12 May 2022 (UTC)

Spooky

• It might be nice to have some context for Square of Hopeful Redemption; likely just indicating the city and/or planet where it is would suit.—spookywilloww^talk 00:20, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
  • Taken care of.— Samonic 07:32, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
    • Seems like the changes now contextualize Redhaven as a city twice, but leave Rhommamool without a descriptor as a world.—spookywilloww^talk 17:35, 24 April 2022 (UTC)
      • Addressed.— Samonic 07:31, 25 April 2022 (UTC)

Braha

• "a group of Yuuzhan Vong agent Nom Anor's followers" This context is confusing to me, since agent is singular and Nom Anor's followers is mentioned as part of the first grouping. Can you un-cluster this please? Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 11:07, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
  • Addressed.
    • Ah, I see how it was meant to convey things. I've tweaked it a tad. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 01:52, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
      • Appreciated :) — Samonic 07:04, 12 May 2022 (UTC)

OOM

• Unless The Essential Reader's Companion states C-9PO was destroyed in 25 ABY, then you'll have to expand the ref note for a further explanation.
• Missing link for colour.
• If a quote in a novel ends with a comma, then simply replace it with a full stop/period in {{Quote}}.
• "with masculine programming" is the preferred phrase for droids rather than simply "masculine."
• You don't need to say "planet of X" every time, like other articles do; it depends on how the sentence is structured. My advice is if you can do without "of" while still being grammatically correct, then just remove it.
• Use the full name "C9PO" instead of "9PO" for formality.
• "all machines" — links shouldn't be there; there are more machines in the galaxy than just droids and speeder bikes :P
• Following that change, there's no need for the link on the first instance of "destruction" either, because speeder bikes.
• Does the source say how the droid was destroyed?
• Be careful with older audiobooks. Back then, they tend to be released sometime after the novel itself rather than simultaneously, like what happened here. OOM 224 11:53, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
  • All done.— Samonic 12:34, 12 May 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 06:41, 17 May 2022 (UTC)