- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a comprehensive article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.
Bron Burs's species
- Nominated by: Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 17:24, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: WP:ALIENS and more Chronicles maquettes
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- 501st
White and blue are disambig pages. You should probally link to color instead.- I thought that is traditionally a matter of personal choice, as long as it's consistent throughout the article. In any case, have pipelinked to color now.
Shouldn't it be added to the infobox that the species was sentient?501st dogma(talk) 19:30, March 15, 2013 (UTC)- Added. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 19:44, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
- Savaged…
- A great deal more should be said about the physical appearance. That head is quite unlike any other alien we have, and it needs to be described. Talk about where the spines are, how many of them there are, where the eyes are located, where the nostrils are located and what their shape is, the shape of the mouth and where it's located, the overall orientation of the head as flatter than it is tall, the way it goes back into concentric semi-circles toward the back, the fact that we can distinguish a head and torso at least from the pictures in Chronicles.
- So this will probably be above 200 words, then the intro would be needed, which would most certainly bring it up to 250 words. May I also request an image from Chronicles? Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 21:24, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
- Check your Wookieepedia email. I have some images but want to send them via email since they'll need to be cropped and whatnot before being usable. ~Savage
13:38, March 16, 2013 (UTC)
- From updating that stuff alone, the article is 229 words now, so with a required intro it will be too long for CA length. I request for this to be archived as a failure (or maybe I'll archive it myself), and will work on further expanding it and putting it on the GAN page when I have the time (though at the moment I have four articles ready to GAN). Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 14:03, March 16, 2013 (UTC)
- Check your Wookieepedia email. I have some images but want to send them via email since they'll need to be cropped and whatnot before being usable. ~Savage
- So this will probably be above 200 words, then the intro would be needed, which would most certainly bring it up to 250 words. May I also request an image from Chronicles? Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 21:24, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
- You should also mention that Burs wore clothing and say what that was.
- In all, I think there's enough visual information here to break out a lead section and then have a proper "Biology and appearance," "Society and culture," and "History" section, even if the latter is only to talk about Burs. ~Savage 20:44, March 15, 2013 (UTC)
- A great deal more should be said about the physical appearance. That head is quite unlike any other alien we have, and it needs to be described. Talk about where the spines are, how many of them there are, where the eyes are located, where the nostrils are located and what their shape is, the shape of the mouth and where it's located, the overall orientation of the head as flatter than it is tall, the way it goes back into concentric semi-circles toward the back, the fact that we can distinguish a head and torso at least from the pictures in Chronicles.
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- I emailed the images to your gmail. ~Savage 15:09, March 16, 2013 (UTC)
- 229 words without an intro. I request for this to be archived, as it can be 250+ words at its most complete state. Hanzo Hasashi (talk) 20:52, March 23, 2013 (UTC)