Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Briala

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Briala

• Nominated by: Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 22:33, February 8, 2020 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:

(4 ECs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Fan26 (Talk) 15:32, February 10, 2020 (UTC)
2. QuiGonJinn ^(Talk) 09:19, February 11, 2020 (UTC)
3. Zed42 (talk) 09:28, February 11, 2020 (UTC)
4. UberSoldat93 (talk) 12:12, February 11, 2020 (UTC)
5. —spookywilloww^talk 15:14, February 11, 2020 (UTC)

Object

Fan

• I think it's a little confusing to refer to the 61st by both its formal, numerical designation and "Twilight Company", in such a short article. You should pick one and use it consistently throughout.
• The date ref needs to elaborate a little to explain that since the mentions of Briala occur during the battle on Allst Prime, those events can be given their date.
• Also on the topic of the date ref, you can trim "and any events occurring prior" from it, since only Allst Prime's date is relevant to this article.
• "Prior to the year 0 BBY," You should say "By the year O BBY," here, as there doesn't seem to be anything saying the Allst Prime battle doesn't also take place in 0 BBY.
• "offering Brand to join their game of lifters" This should be reworded. It currently reads more like the mirlanian was offering Brand as a potential player to the other players instead of asking her if she'd like to play, which I'm guessing is closer to what actually happens in the story. Fan26 (Talk) 23:41, February 9, 2020 (UTC)
  • All addressed. Braha'tok enthusiast (talk) 07:43, February 10, 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 15:14, February 11, 2020 (UTC)