Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Bomarmo

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Bomarmo

• Nominated by: BloodOfIrizi (talk) 02:28, 22 June 2022 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:chiss nom nom nom
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Support

1. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 19:24, 28 June 2022 (UTC)
2. This one was nice, well done! Samonic 20:29, 28 June 2022 (UTC)
3. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 07:06, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
4. Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 06:36, 20 July 2022 (UTC)
5. Imperators II^(Talk) 17:50, 20 July 2022 (UTC)

Object

General Crofyp

• Please look at this copy-edit. (Review note)
  • noted, thank you
• The term Sky-walker will be new to many readers, can you provide context for the term?
  • reworded, hows that?
    • Better, but you don't provide context for Chaos, now.
• You're sourcing that the pair settled on Ool prior to 18 BBY to the date note, while only 18 BBY should be sourced to the note. (Which they settled on prior to [x] 18 BBY.[2])
  • fixed
• Bomarmo did not appear in Thrawn Ascendancy: Lesser Evil. Samonic 09:36, 22 June 2022 (UTC)
  • fixed BloodOfIrizi (talk) 17:01, 22 June 2022 (UTC)
• Bomarmo is not specified to be Chiss.
  • I will remove this objection, but I still disagree. Samonic 16:04, 23 June 2022 (UTC)
• Mention Thalias-Borika meeting in the body, as well as Borika's mention of Bomarmo. (And remove the link from the quote) Samonic 18:05, 22 June 2022 (UTC)
  • added :) BloodOfIrizi (talk) 19:05, 22 June 2022 (UTC)
• "By 18 BBY,[2] the pair o...": You can't source that to {{Tl|LesserEvilDate}}, you will have to create a date note of your own. In addition, templates don't have to be italicized, I have removed the italics in my copy-edits, which you should review. (Review note) Samonic 16:04, 23 June 2022 (UTC)
  • does that work? BloodOfIrizi (talk) 18:13, 23 June 2022 (UTC)

Braha'marmo

• "the pair owned Ardok Ranch a ranch on the planet Ool, the ranch was home to a training site for the Seekers' Shadehouse, a facility which wiped the memories of the Chiss Sky-walkers, young girls with abilites that helped the Chiss navigate the space outside of the Ascendancy's borders." Some suggestions for this sentence:
  • The context for the ranch needs to be comma'd either side.
    • done
  • The part after Ool can just be a second sentence, it flows horribly putting it in as a continuation.
    • done
  • The shadehouse's article mentions it's located near the ranch. I think that should be worked into that context.
    • i believe its interpreted that the shadehouse was ON the ranch, not near it. "The ranch was home to a training site for the Seekers' Shadehouse" includes that, i believe
• A few things for the dating as well. I'm seeing that the events take place around 18 BBY. That should be part of the first 18 BBY dating as well. And secondly, the second dating in the article can just use the first article's date note as it's for the novel's main events, which is what is depicted in that sentence as far as I can tell. Braha'tok enthusiast ^{Hello there} 21:59, 24 June 2022 (UTC)
  • hows that? BloodOfIrizi (talk) 01:27, 27 June 2022 (UTC)

CC-8

• "who joined the Cohbo family after marrying Bomarmo." I don't think that's necessary to state, the characters getting married already implies that Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 02:28, 13 July 2022 (UTC)
  • I think its worth keeping as it provides context for a reader who may be unfamiliar with Chiss family naming protocols BloodOfIrizi (talk) 17:48, 15 July 2022 (UTC)
    • Gonna second CC8 here, you say Bomarmo is the "husband of Cohbo'rik'ardok "Borika"", sentence can finish there as being the husband. The naming protocal isn't relevant as you provide the name, that is more relevant to the article covering Chiss culture and possibly the article for the family. Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 10:48, 16 July 2022 (UTC)
      • alright, ill defer to you here. removed :) BloodOfIrizi (talk) 00:34, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
        • It's still in the article Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 06:43, 18 July 2022 (UTC)
          • guess i forgot to hit save smh. removed BloodOfIrizi (talk) 19:20, 18 July 2022 (UTC)
            • It's a wook rite of passage :P Commander Code-8 ^{Hello There!} 06:36, 20 July 2022 (UTC)

Manoof

• You use sky-walker and skywalker, if they're both correct can you be consistent on which one you use within the article Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 10:56, 16 July 2022 (UTC)
  • done
• Remove the self-linking in the reference please :) You can also use Borika rather than the full chiss name Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 10:56, 16 July 2022 (UTC)
  • done
• We have Category:Chiss families so I think we need Category:Cohbo family ;) Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 10:56, 16 July 2022 (UTC)
  • created and added BloodOfIrizi (talk) 00:44, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
    • It was a sofixit, but just for future remember to remove parents categories (Category:Chiss) from subcategories (Category:Cohbo family) and make sure the categories are alphabetized :) Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 07:06, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
      • To clarify, parent categories are removed from the article if a subcategory is present, don't remove it from the subcategory itself lol Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 11:10, 17 July 2022 (UTC)

Imp

• "Sky-walker" is inconsistently capitalized. Imperators II^(Talk) 07:43, 20 July 2022 (UTC)
  • fixed BloodOfIrizi (talk) 15:53, 20 July 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 17:50, 20 July 2022 (UTC)