Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Battle of Zel system

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Battle of Zel system

  • Nominated by: NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 20:38, January 16, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: In which Xamsters slam some xanthic xylophones.

(2 ECs/2 Users/4 Total)

Support

  1. ---501st DogmaRepublic emblem(Comlink) 21:20, January 17, 2012 (UTC)
  2. ECvote Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 22:40, January 20, 2012 (UTC)
  3. ECvote—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 14:30, January 25, 2012 (UTC)
  4. Imperators II(Talk) 11:57, January 26, 2012 (UTC)

Object

  1. 501st
    • Link Manadlorian Neo-crusaders in Infobox
      • You probably see objections like this on your nominations, but that's because you're new and we want you to be familiar with things. We call things you can do yourself in less time than it took to write out that sentence, like single links, "sofixits". Good catch all the same. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 22:28, January 16, 2012 (UTC)
      • OK, thanks for the heads up---501st DogmaRepublic emblem(Comlink) 21:20, January 17, 2012 (UTC)
    • "between the Galactic Republic and Mandalorian Neo-Crusaders that had invaded their space". Change "that" to "who" so the Mandalorian Neo-Crusaders do not sound like a thing and instead of a group of people. Also, maybe change "their space" to Republic space so it is easier to tell who is invading whom.
    • Good work---501st DogmaRepublic emblem(Comlink) 21:22, January 16, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Jujiggum
    • "The battle took place during a Mandalorian campaign to capture the Core World of Duro called Mandalorian Triumph." Grammar here—it currently suggests that the world of Duro was called "Mandalorian Triumph."
    • I feel like this: "…from which they moved on to victories in the Commenor system and the Quellor system. They then triumphed in the Exodeen system and staged their successful conquest of Duro from there." is a bit more information than is really warranted by the article's subject. If both of the battles at Commenor and Quellor immediately followed the one at Zel, then that part is alright (although the infobox suggests that only Commenor followed immediately), but I don't think that the mention of Exodeen is necessary; just a general reference that they succeed in conquering Duro would be fine.
      • I agree. Removed mention of the success of Duros because keeping it here would pretty much be the same as putting that into the Battle of Eres III. I don't think would be relevant to the battle in question until you get towards the end of the charge. NaruHina Talk Anakinsolo 21:00, January 20, 2012 (UTC)
    • Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 18:45, January 20, 2012 (UTC)
  3. Imperators II
    • Please source the fact that Zeltros is located in the Zel system. Imperators II(Talk) 22:54, January 20, 2012 (UTC)

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