Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Battle of Nar Shaddaa

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Battle of Nar Shaddaa

• Nominated by: LucaRoR ^(Talk) 19:54, 13 August 2021 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: I plan to nominate all the articles regarding Master Crucitorn: second one!
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1. Interesting topic. Keep up the good work! infectedzombieguy(Talk to me!) 10:54, 14 August 2021 (UTC)
2. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 20:42, 17 August 2021 (UTC)
3. VergenceScatter (talk) 00:28, 18 August 2021 (UTC)
4. —spookywilloww^talk 05:13, 19 August 2021 (UTC)
5. UberSoldat93 (talk) 17:44, 19 August 2021 (UTC)
6. Please take note of my edit here OOM 224 19:33, 19 August 2021 (UTC)

Object

Enduring the pain of what?

• At the end of your second paragraph, you say "learning how to use the Force to endure the pain was fundamental for a Jedi." What I am confused about is this talking about enduring pain in general or enduring some specific pain? If it's the former, it should probably be rephrased to be clearer. If it's the latter, please elaborate on what that pain is. Other than that, it's a great page! infectedzombieguy(Talk to me!) 00:34, 14 August 2021 (UTC)
  • I've added "physical" it should be clearer now. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 06:36, 14 August 2021 (UTC)

Macaroni

• The separate ref for the spelling is unnecessary, per precedent.
• The date reference does not specify what established that Jinn became Dooku's apprentice when he was 12. JediMasterMacaroni^(Talk) 18:38, 17 August 2021 (UTC)
  • Both done. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 19:47, 17 August 2021 (UTC)

Spooky

• While I'm not sure of the exact precedent on it in status article battles, it makes sense that the battle could be established to be prior to the point where Dooku's talking about it, like "Before/Prior to x year". Was contemplating that for the |date= field in the infobox and I thought it might suit to put that it was at some point prior to that year, as the way they're talking about it is definitely in past tense, and remembering. Such a change would also need to be slightly reflected in the body, as well, if in the infobox. Not a huge deal if you're not able to make it work, though.—spookywilloww^talk 03:17, 19 August 2021 (UTC)
  • How's that? LucaRoR ^(Talk) 04:56, 19 August 2021 (UTC)
    • Hmm yeah that's the gist of what I meant, though allowance should be made for that it could've occurred before or during that year. Also, could be noted in the infobox.—spookywilloww^talk 05:01, 19 August 2021 (UTC)
      • Added to the infobox, Qui-Gon Jinn says that now they are in a period of peace, to say a period, at least 1 year must have past since the last war. LucaRoR ^(Talk) 05:11, 19 August 2021 (UTC)
        • Alright, thanks sounds good.—spookywilloww^talk 05:13, 19 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 07:43, 21 August 2021 (UTC)