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Aryx
- Nominated by: VergenceScatter (talk) 17:07, 29 August 2021 (UTC)
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Commander Code-8 Hello There! 09:11, 7 September 2021 (UTC)- UberSoldat93
(talk) 18:40, 7 September 2021 (UTC) - LucaRoR
(Talk) 15:58, 8 September 2021 (UTC) - OOM 224 18:06, 8 September 2021 (UTC)
- JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 04:57, 9 September 2021 (UTC)
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Links shouldn't be made in quote attributions if they're also made in the body"stating that she was unsure if would" I would change this in a copy-edit but I'm not sure exactly what you want to say here- Both fixed.
You're using "was" in the Bts when you're talking about a plural word, so it should be "were"- It's not plural, so I'm not quite sure what you mean here.
- When you're talking about a species it's a plural, if it was something like "The Humans was first mentioned" that would be more visibly grammatically wrong. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 03:54, 4 September 2021 (UTC)
- It's not plural, so I'm not quite sure what you mean here.
The first sentence kind of sounds like Cerea could be ridden- Reworded.
"asked Aleri and the other members of the team taking part in the mission if they knew how to ride" What were they riding?Commander Code-8 Hello There! 05:47, 2 September 2021 (UTC)- She doesn't ask about a specific species; she just asks if they're able to. It's because Kiri doesn't know what they're riding that she doesn't know if riding an aryx counts. VergenceScatter (talk) 20:43, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
The date reference notes should include the source the events are portrayed/described in.Commander Code-8 Hello There! 03:54, 4 September 2021 (UTC)- How's that? VergenceScatter (talk) 22:36, 4 September 2021 (UTC)
- Better, but unless we know Yellow Moon took place on New Years Day the article should say "prior to Operation Yellow Moon in 4 ABY". I think you should be able to combine the reference notes that way. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 07:59, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
- How's that? VergenceScatter (talk) 15:53, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
- Better, but unless we know Yellow Moon took place on New Years Day the article should say "prior to Operation Yellow Moon in 4 ABY". I think you should be able to combine the reference notes that way. Commander Code-8 Hello There! 07:59, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
- How's that? VergenceScatter (talk) 22:36, 4 September 2021 (UTC)
Mac
Legends page says that they appeared but bts says mentioned here. Which is it?JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 21:30, 5 September 2021 (UTC)- Appeared. Fixed VergenceScatter (talk) 15:53, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
Context for Jaresh.JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 22:13, 6 September 2021 (UTC)- Done. VergenceScatter (talk) 01:00, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
UberSoldat
BTS needs comic writer and illustrator.UberSoldat93 (talk) 09:07, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
- VergenceScatter (talk) 14:17, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Comprehensive article by EduCorps 18:06, 8 September 2021 (UTC)