Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Amden vor Keioidian

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Amden vor Keioidian

• Nominated by: DarthRevan1173 (Long live Lord Revan) 00:43, September 2, 2013 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:For Project Novels

(3 ECs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:46, September 5, 2013 (UTC)
2. Supreme Emperor (talk) 04:17, September 6, 2013 (UTC)
3. 501st dogma^(talk) 20:49, September 9, 2013 (UTC)
4. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 05:25, September 20, 2013 (UTC)
5. Woops, forgot to support earlier. Commander Code-8 ^{You lost the game!} 23:30, September 29, 2013 (UTC)

Object

• SE
  • In the intro can you tweak the sentence regarding the Battle of Kalandis Seven to reflect the name of the battle is conjecture?
    • Changed.
  • Can you do this in the bio as well?
    • Also changed. DarthRevan1173 (Long live Lord Revan) 04:46, September 4, 2013 (UTC)
  • Nice work. Supreme Emperor (talk) 03:51, September 3, 2013 (UTC)
  • Wait, did he die before or after the tracer was activated??? 501st dogma^(talk) 22:35, September 6, 2013 (UTC)
    • After I presume the story refers to him as a dying man, however never shows Keioidian die nor does it show Keioidian being rescued. I've removed his death since it's not confirmed. DarthRevan1173 (Long live Lord Revan) 22:48, September 7, 2013 (UTC)

1. Exiled Jedi
   • Could you mention that his species was unspecified in the BTS?
     • Mentioned.
   • In the body you say that he was fatally wounded, but do not say that he died in the infobox or in the body.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 14:53, September 14, 2013 (UTC)
     • Being referred to as a dying man is not quite the same as fatally wounded, which in my opinion means that he will die no matter what happens. You should probably reword it.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 14:56, September 14, 2013 (UTC)
       • I removed his death since the story doesn't show it. If I add it back in my opinion it would be speculation since while it does classify him as a dying man he doesn't die in the story at the same time. I can re-worded it to say he was wounded or dying if that would work better. DarthRevan1173 (Long live Lord Revan) 00:40, September 15, 2013 (UTC)
         • Yeah, I would reword it to say that he was dying from his wounds or something similar.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 04:31, September 20, 2013 (UTC)
           • Re-worded hows it look. DarthRevan1173 (Long live Lord Revan) 05:16, September 20, 2013 (UTC)

1. • CC-8
     • Can you make it clearer if the story makes it ambiguous if he died. Commander Code-8 ^{You lost the game!} 02:58, September 24, 2013 (UTC)
       • I added a note in the bts, besides that I'm not sure I can make it much clearer. I'm open to suggestions if you have an idea. DarthRevan1173 (Long live Lord Revan) 01:05, September 25, 2013 (UTC)
         • I've changed your wording a bit but you did fine. Commander Code-8 ^{You lost the game!} 03:30, September 28, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

• There was absolutely no reason for this article to have an intro. The body was barely oveer 100 words, and they were essentially the same thing. I've removed the intro. Cade Calrayn 23:08, September 9, 2013 (UTC)