Wookieepedia:Comprehensive article nominations/Ado Eemon/Legends

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Ado Eemon

• Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 18:19, May 30, 2011 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: ...

(2 ECs/2 Users/4 Total)

Support

1. Imperators II^(Talk) 20:10, June 6, 2011 (UTC)
2. --Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 14:42, June 8, 2011 (UTC)

   I missed something.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 12:56, June 10, 2011 (UTC)

3. ~Savage 20:55, June 10, 2011 (UTC)
4. Menkooroo 06:58, June 15, 2011 (UTC)

Object

1. Exiled Jedi
   • You should probably directly mention (and link) that he was a male in the body of the article.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 20:11, June 2, 2011 (UTC)
     • Added. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 18:00, June 3, 2011 (UTC)
   • I am going to look it over one more time before supporting.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 19:25, June 3, 2011 (UTC)
2. Imperators II
   • Is it specified whether his "private fleet of gunships" consisted of the Heavy Missile Platforms? If it is, "the" is necessary. Imperators II^(Talk) 18:42, June 5, 2011 (UTC)
     • It is specified, but what "the" do you mean? Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:16, June 6, 2011 (UTC)
3. Bob
   • "Ado Eemon was the male silken-tongued ruler[1] of the Mid Rim[2] planet Caramm V during the Clone Wars.." I think you are trying to cram too much information into one sentence here. The way this is worded, it sounds like Caramm V had more than one ruler, like a female one, or one who wasn't silken-tongued. I'd suggest saying something like "Ado Eemon was the ruler of..." and then listing the maleness and smooth-talking bits later.
     • Reworded.
   • Can you find a synonym for "gunship" for at least one of the uses?
     • Varied.
   • "beautiful" is POV. Can you attribute this assessment to someone or a group? Otherwise, beautiful article. :) ~Savage 05:27, June 7, 2011 (UTC)
     • Is it still POV if a source exlicitely tells it so. That's the case here. Thanks for the beautiful review. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 16:35, June 7, 2011 (UTC)
       • Not if you say, "So-and-so considered the world beautiful." But apparently not the case here. ~Savage 21:57, June 7, 2011 (UTC)
       • Whoops; I thought you had taken care of the POV issue, but it remains. ~Savage 22:35, June 9, 2011 (UTC)
         • I thought that too. Killed now. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 16:23, June 10, 2011 (UTC)
4. Exiled Jedi
   • You need to mention Star Wars: Complete Cross-Sections in the behind the scenes section.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 12:56, June 10, 2011 (UTC)
     • Added. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 16:23, June 10, 2011 (UTC)
   • And also take care of the POV problem.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 12:56, June 10, 2011 (UTC)
     • Killed. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 16:23, June 10, 2011 (UTC)

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