Rewrite, fanon purge
Per the anon's reverts, etc. I'm rereading the article and the source material. However, it was not my intent to add fanon, and if it got in, then it was only the result of over analyzing on my part. I'll go part by part on what was removed.
targeted as a major threat by the Jedi Council near the end of the New Sith Wars.
I'll admit this was just over analyzing. The text says that Crian is following Krul. He admits that she's been tracking him, and the text describes him as her "quarry". Further parts in the story clarify that she was sent to take him out, but does it mean the Jedi council sent her? Is the Jedi Council mentioned? No. I admit that. I'll change it to just "Jedi". I think the anonymous user might be trying to say that Maru was on her own personal vendetta, but I think the Jedi being able to find them on Balowa and Maru's mention that she and her Padawan are on some sort of job is evidence against that. My first thoughts were that only the Jedi Council would send a Jedi to do this sort of mission, but I admit, that's not mentioned in the text, and is a fanon interpretation, it should be removed.
and had developed a mental link with the leader of the Brotherhood of Darkness, so that he could be summoned at great distances.
I don't see how this can be disputed. On Balowa, Krul is distracted by Kaan calling to him. "He could sense his Master's summons in the Force, and he could not resist the beckoning much longer." I don't know how else that passage can be interpreted. He can be summoned in the Force, even when he's on Balowa. In fact, he doesn't even know if he can ignore the summons for much longer.
Eventually, due to his talent in the Force, Krul was recruited by the Brotherhood to fight in the New Sith Wars.
This was just an introduction statement. It should be obvious that Krul is strong in the Force. He's in the Brotherhood. Put two and two together and you get... I don't think this can really be an issue with fanon, as there's not really any other options here.
As a member of the lower echelons of the Brotherhood army, Krul fought in numerous conflicts, using his abilities in the Force and whatever weapons he could get his hands on.
Okay, this might be interpretation, but this is obviously another case of what is obvious and what is not. Obviously you would start out as a grunt in the army (Bane himself started out this way after all), and according to the text, he didn't even have a lightsaber. "Kaox hadn't constructed the weapon. He had earned the lightsaber, taking it from the still-grasping hand of the first Jedi he had killed in personal combat." I think this passage proves that Kaox used whatever he could get his hands on, if he salvaged a Jedi lightsaber. It can obviously be reworded, but it was just a set up to the mention of him salvaging the lightsaber.
Krul's talent in the dark side allowed him to kill the Jedi
What do you want me to say here? That his talent didn't help him? He killed a Jedi with a lightsaber, and he didn't have one. I'm not saying "He killed him with Force-lightning". I'm not mentioning that he killed him with the Force, only that his strength in the dark side allowed him to do the deed. I think mention of his "faith in the dark side of the Force." has a lot to do with propping up this statement.
Equipped with his lightsaber, Krul began to make a name for himself on the battlefield.
Artsy wording maybe, but fanon? He made a name for himself with the weapon. He lists off his accomplishments, accomplishments that made him known as the Marauder, only after he acquired this weapon. How else can this be said?
to slaughter members of the Army of Light with an unmatched ferocity. Krul's dark side fury during battle
Unmatched was just artsy wording. Removing.
In campaigns during the New Sith War, Krul racked up more than two hundred kills with his lightsaber, causing the Jedi army to take special note of his formidable power.
You got it right here, my bad. The wording is "At his side, clipped to his belt, hung the lightsaber that he had used to kill more than a hundred foes." I took this to mean two hundred, result of poor reading. I don't see why the mention of the Jedi army taking note needs to be removed. The guy's known as the Marauder, he's got a reputation. We know why he has this reputation, he lists the reasons.
Elevating himself from a simple Sith warrior to a Sith Lord, Krul created a specialized suit of Sith armor. Protective padding and composite plates made up the armor, and it was adorned with Sith symbols to help protect Krul from minor Force attacks. As a final addition to the suit's power, Krul used Sith Alchemy to imbue the armor with dark side energy.
You replaced this passage with different wording for some unknown reason. It created "a barrier that provided some protection against the abilities of the Jedi.". I took that to mean Force attacks. Simple as that. The Sith symbols are mentioned later in the story. "The symbols etched into the armor resonated with the dark side."
Krul found a worthy foe in the Jedi Karist Dem, and he grew to despise the Jedi over the course of the war. However, Krul's faith in the dark side proved successful, and he eventually overcame his rival on the battlefield. Krul slaughtered the Jedi warrior,[1] as he was not known for his ability to turn opponents to the dark side. In fact, he had never been successful in turning one of his Jedi opponents away from the light side all the way up to his final battle.
So...what's wrong here? The Jedi is obviously of special note, since he's mentioned by Krul as he tallies up his accomplishments. He was despised by Krul according to the text, "or a despised foe the likes of that Jedi, Karist Dem". I thought mention of Krul's inability to turn Jedi needed to be mentioned, so I used this case of his killing of Karist to explain the problem he had with it.
Krul's reputation as a fearsome Sith warrior eventually led to the Army of Light assigning a Jedi to personally track him down and neutralize him. For this important task, a prestigious teacher at the Jedi Temple, Crian Maru, was assigned with bringing the violent warrior to justice. Along with her Padawan, Dree Vandap, Maru tracked the darksider in her ship, the Golden Song. For over a month Krul continued to wage campaigns of terror on Galactic Republic worlds, staying one step ahead of the Jedi Knight.
This is obviously just a disagreement over whether Maru was on a mission to track down Krul or not. I say she was on a mission, and I think her mentioning that "It was time to finish the job they had set out to do.", and the fact that a Jedi locates them at the end of the story is proof. But I'm open to changing it, if you don't think that's the case. "She grew up in the Jedi Temple, where she learned the ways of the Jedi from teachers such as Lord Hoth and Crian Maru." That's proof to me that she was a prestigious teacher, if she's mentioned along the likes of Lord Hoth. "This one, the human woman, had been hounding Kaox for more than a month." That's proof to me that she had tracked him for over a month.
However, the young Padawan was no match for the Sith warrior as Krul pressed his advantage.
Interpretation on my part. Removed.
Due to the dark side induced deaths of Maru and Krul, the pool became a Dark side nexus.
Interpretation, but valid interpretation on my part I think. "The whole place felt ill, deformed. Haunted." "All he found in the Force, though, was darkness and despair." "Behind him the dank wind whistled through the twisted trees, and the shadows grew deeper. For a moment, he thought he heard the hum of lightsabers" Those mentions all appear to me to support the notion that the area had become some sort of haunted burial place consistent with a Dark side nexus, but if you think that it needs to be changed somewhat, mention of the haunted nature of the place need to stay at least.
his proficiency in performing difficult Force techniques.
He could levitate, he could run as fast as a speeder bike. He could receive telekinetic messages from Kaan lightyears away. What else would you call these?
That's all from me, thanks for going over it with a fine tooth comb, things can escape me, but I think most of what I wrote can be defended. Cull Tremayne 10:24, 4 November 2007 (UTC)
Krul's Lightsaber
In the body of the article it states :
Eventually, Krul found himself in personal combat with an unknown Jedi. Krul's talent in the dark side allowed him to kill the Jedi, and he ripped the Jedi's lightsaber from his still-warm fingers, claiming it for his own. Krul replaced the weapon's lightsaber crystal with a synth-crystal that created a red blade.
I just finished reading Darkness Shared not ten minutes ago, and nowhere in the story did I see any mention of Krul replacing the original crystal with a synthetic red one. Unless this tidbit of info came from another source I suggest it be removed from the article. 205.250.9.39 23:36, April 18, 2010 (UTC)