Wookieepedia:Featured article nominations/Daal

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Daal

  • Nominated by: Mor9347 ForPipadaLogo-UserImage (Talk) 19:21, 9 October 2025 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: My longest article so far, I think I did fairly decently...
  • Word count at nomination time: 3616 words (355 introduction, 2482 body, 779 behind the scenes)
  • WookieeProject (optional): WP:Visions WP:Women

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Fan
  • Daal's gender appears to be infobox-exclusive Fan26 (Talk) 19:23, 9 October 2025 (UTC)
  • So is Sith Mother's faction it would seem Fan26 (Talk) 19:26, 9 October 2025 (UTC)
    • Ah thanks for noticing those and being so quick with that lol, fixed! Mor9347 ForPipadaLogo-UserImage (Talk) 19:32, 9 October 2025 (UTC)
      • I think the pipelink through "joined" in the intro is unneeded; it's fine to only mention the faction in the body. Additionally her gender remains unspecified in the article body. Fan26 (Talk) 19:34, 9 October 2025 (UTC)
        • it's specified in the P&T, does it need to be in the Bio? Removed the faction pipelink in the intro. Mor9347 ForPipadaLogo-UserImage (Talk) 19:49, 9 October 2025 (UTC)
          • No that's fine then, there's precedent. Fan26 (Talk) 20:33, 9 October 2025 (UTC)
  • In the first sentence of the bio I would prefer it if the Factory Workshop is identified before it is referred to as an Imperial workhouse, rather than this sentence introducing a nameless Imperial workhouse it subsequently identifies as the Factory Workshop. Ordering the info properly and all. Fan26 (Talk) 20:33, 9 October 2025 (UTC)
Stakeout
  • A bit nitpicky, but in this sentence "In the short, Eva Whittaker voiced Daal. She never imagined [...]" it might be best to add a qualifier like "according to" or "who, when interviewed, revealed", or something similar. Stake black msg 20:55, 9 October 2025 (UTC)
    • I don't mind nitpicky objections, just whatever sounds best for everyone! changed! Mor9347 ForPipadaLogo-UserImage (Talk) 21:14, 9 October 2025 (UTC)
Comet
  • In the intro, Screecher's Reach isn't given context until a couple sentences after it's first introduced, so I think it would be good to move its context to its first mention. Same with the Screecher
  • In the body, I think it would be good to name the Screecher when she's first mentioned so that it's more clear who she is when her name comes up later on
  • The Test section is four paragraphs, so it could be split
  • I don't think the Screecher's gender is directly citable to the episode (Her page cites the audio description for it)
  • The last section of the BTS looks like it has room for an image CometSmudge (talk) 00:56, 26 October 2025 (UTC)
    • Done with the above! sorry it took a while. Mor9347 ForPipadaLogo-UserImage (Talk) 16:19, 2 November 2025 (UTC)
  • I think most or all of the cases of dialogue being directly quoted in prose should be paraphrased instead. The first instance of "I follow your path with strength and courage" might be important enough to directly quote, but in other cases I don't think exact quotes are needed. CometSmudge (talk) 03:26, 6 November 2025 (UTC)
    • I kept James Waugh's "a subverted Luke Skywalker story" and Quinn's "kick'n her up the arse!" since I wouldn't know how to write it in prose without using "butt" or "ass" and have it sound right. I removed the others though I believe. lmk if I missed any you wanted removed! Mor9347 ForPipadaLogo-UserImage (Talk) 20:00, 19 November 2025 (UTC)
  • There's a few contractions in the BTS that should be fully written out
  • The final paragraph of the Development section could be merged with another paragraph to avoid having a four paragraph section
  • Once you've established Redondo is the art director, you don't need to include that in subsequent mentions of him
  • Empire Strikes Back should have a year
    • I believe the above are now addressed. Mor9347 ForPipadaLogo-UserImage (Talk) 18:01, 22 November 2025 (UTC)
  • The article is in a maintenance category, Category:WebCite usages without work parameter CometSmudge (talk) 03:46, 22 November 2025 (UTC)
    • Reaching out to discord for discussion Mor9347 ForPipadaLogo-UserImage (Talk) 18:01, 22 November 2025 (UTC)
  • In the sentence, "they used the same symbology" could you either clarify who "they" is or tweak the sentence so it doesn't need to be used?
  • In the Strength and courage section, I think you could be more explicit that the figure is the Screecher, since it's a bit vague until later in the section. CometSmudge (talk) 03:48, 11 December 2025 (UTC)
    • I personally preferred the vagueness but I won't object, both issues have been resolved. Mor9347 ForPipadaLogo-UserImage (Talk) 16:12, 11 December 2025 (UTC)
  • The Story Gallery citation should specify the slide number like the concept art gallery citations do
  • ESB will need another ref for its release year, since it isn't in the article CometSmudge (talk) 22:00, 13 December 2025 (UTC)

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