Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Zeison Sha

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Zeison Sha

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Support

  1. Nominated. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 18:20, 13 August 2007 (UTC)
  2. It looks great. --Jedimca0(Do or Do Not, There is No Try) 09:44, 14 August 2007 (UTC)
  3. Graestan Jedi Order (This party's over) 15:35, 15 August 2007 (UTC)
  4. -- AckbarSigdmirableAckbar (It's A Trap!) 23:53, 15 August 2007 (UTC)
  5. --Goodwood 12:35, 16 August 2007 (UTC)
  6. Greyman(Paratus) 03:17, 18 August 2007 (UTC)
  7. Hobbes15(Tiger Headquarters) 04:48, 18 August 2007 (UTC)

Object

  1. Could use a general prose cleanup. Paragraphs are too small-many of them only one or two sentences long. Try not to use the Order's name too much (like, not in every other sentance?).--Goodwood 01:24, 14 August 2007 (UTC)
    • Addressed. I had browser issues when writing this, so apologies. And I avoided using "the Order" because the source material does not refer to them as such. The remaining paragraphs are set up to distinguish between minor topics. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 02:36, 14 August 2007 (UTC)
      • Formatting looks much better. It could still use a few creative substitutions for the name; for instance, using "members of this tradition would" instead of "the Zeison Sha would".--Goodwood 02:50, 14 August 2007 (UTC)

Comments

  • Perhaps EGttF will provide the material I need to get this to FA. Atarumaster88 Jedi Order (Talk page) 18:20, 13 August 2007 (UTC)
  • On the other hand, it is well-sourced.--Goodwood 01:24, 14 August 2007 (UTC)