Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Yur T'aug

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Yur T'aug

  • Nominated by: Coruscantfan (Talk) 04:33, December 29, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Too bad he doesn't appear more often, he has interesting motives.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:35, January 1, 2013 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:21, January 8, 2013 (UTC)
  3. Winterz (talk) 16:15, January 29, 2013 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 03:30, February 1, 2013 (UTC)
  5. I actually didn't find anything. Good work. :P MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 22:57, February 2, 2013 (UTC)

Object

Floyd
  • Since the intro is supposed to be a general overview of the whole article, I think it should be noted that he clashed with the Jedi about his investigation.
    • Done.
  • I'm finding you using first names in the text; for example, "When Qui-Gon and his Padawan". You should always use last names, unless you are distinguishing between multiple people with the same last name. Fix this.
    • Done.
  • "Kenobi and Qui-Gon investigated the deaths further, discovering that T'aug had failed to properly investigate Ren's death." Double "investigate". Try to avoid this type of repetition. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 01:40, December 31, 2012 (UTC)
Winterz
  • The "Ren had been Force-sensitive" is a bit confusing and makes it appear that he lost his force-sensitivity at some point. You should reword with another verbal tense.
    • Done.
  • "Confronting the Senator, she said that she was (...)". I understand that the sentence previous to this one gives a briefy entry to it, however, it would be best to clarify who exactly confronted the Senator and a notion of the time relative to the Jedi confrontation of the Bothan (then, after or something alike should be enough).
    • Done.
      • You still are not explicit about who confronted her. I understand you may be trying to avoid repeating the "The Jedi" or "Kenobi and Jinn", so one I'd suggest, in case if you want to take it or not, would be "Master and Padawan". Just please, identify the individuals who confronted her! ;) Winterz (talk) 01:08, January 29, 2013 (UTC)
  • You use a lot of "resent"s in the P&t and I'm sorry for being too picky but you should avoid such cases :P. Use synonyms, sir! Winterz (talk) 16:55, January 25, 2013 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 22:58, February 2, 2013 (UTC)