Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Yuln

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Yuln

  • Nominated by: —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 17:07, November 29, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: "Oh, Irony…" Part the 1

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:51, November 29, 2010 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Cake.—Tommy 9281 20:21, November 29, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Master Jonathan New Jedi Order (Jedi Council Chambers) 20:25, November 29, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Ouch! Menkooroo 02:29, December 1, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:38, December 1, 2010 (UTC)
  6. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 17:31, December 2, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Tommy:
  • "In 137 ABY, the Sith–Imperial forces to the planet Agamar…" Seems like something is missing here...
  • "She further questioned Bokar about the Sith that had perished in the fighting." What about them did she question?
  • That's all.—Tommy 9281 18:05, November 29, 2010 (UTC)
    • Thank you very much for the review, Tommy.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 20:18, November 29, 2010 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Is the following happening during their search on Agamar? Please give some brief context for when and where this is happening: "Three days after the Sith–Imperial ambush of Fel's forces and the Jedi, Yuln informed Bokar that all the remaining Jedi and Imperial Knights were dead."
    • Please try it.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:11, December 1, 2010 (UTC)
      • This objection has really only been half resolved. It still doesn't give any real context as to where this is happening. Are they discussing this as they're walking across Agamar looking for survivors, for example? Please explain this. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:14, December 1, 2010 (UTC)
  • Arguing how? Please do a little bit more to describe the substance of their debate: "The two Sith began arguing over the Sith, Jedi, and Imperial Knights who perished during the battle."
  • Why, specifically, does the article capitalize "Orders" here? AFAIK, there is no reason why "Order" should be capitalized in relation to the Imperial Knights: "to mean that the Sith were superior to both Orders." Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:46, November 30, 2010 (UTC)
  • Bokar's article refers to his character's tattoos as Sith tattoos, but this article does not. Is there any reason for this discrepancy? Toprawa and Ralltiir 01:09, November 30, 2010 (UTC)
    • Fixed, and thanks for the review!—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:11, December 1, 2010 (UTC)
  • Your resolution of the tattoo objection now brings up a new issue. Are you sure those are meant to be rings in her cheek and not stitches? Because it looks like they're covering up some kind of scar. Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:14, December 1, 2010 (UTC)
    • Changed.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 23:29, December 1, 2010 (UTC)
      • That's just my interpretation of it anyway, since it looks to me like a scar and stitches. If it turns out to be rings or whatever, feel free to change it of course. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:38, December 1, 2010 (UTC)
Xd1358
  • Only one: "Yuln, a humanoid female, served as a Sith in Dark Lord of the Sith Darth Krayt's Sith Order during the Second Imperial Civil War." That "served as a Sith" sounds rather awkward in there, as she was in the Sith Order. Perhaps "Yuln, a humanoid female Sith served in Dark Lord…" would be better? 1358 (Talk) 12:36, November 30, 2010 (UTC)
    • Fixed, and also addressed for Bokar.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 23:38, November 30, 2010 (UTC)
Jeffers
  • Just a quick one that I missed in the prenom: "Yuln further questioned Bokar regarding his belief that the Sith who had perished in the fighting were therefore weak and deserved to be removed from Darth Krayt's Order." That's not true --- Rasi and Azlyn ambushed them immediately after he claimed that, and her only further line is "Yaaaah!" Menkooroo 00:23, December 1, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:55, December 6, 2010 (UTC)