- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Yeeru Chivkyrie
- Nominated by: Pranay Sobusk ~ Talk to me 17:02, 9 October 2008 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: This is my first GAN, so it's probably not the best article on this site, but I will do a lot to bring this article up to GA standards.
(3 AC/2 users/5 total)
Support
- IFYLOFD (And now, young Skywalker, you will die.) 21:01, 23 October 2008 (UTC)
- Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 16:05, 30 October 2008 (UTC)- Nice article for your first GAN, Sobusk :) Greyman(Talk) 21:16, 5 November 2008 (UTC)
- I couldn't resist emerging from depths of the internet to support this because my 1st GA was from Allegiance too... Aqua Unasi 22:13, 5 November 2008 (UTC)
- QuiGonJinnThe ability to speak does not make you intelligent.
18:51, 18 November 2008 (UTC)
Oppose
Hi Sobusk. Nice to see you're trying for a GA. A few things:In the intro it would be good to mention what Republic Redux is.- Addressed
"In 0 ABY he wanted Rebel Alliance to join Governor Barshnis..." This doesn't quite make sense. I think there might be a couple of words missing. You also should mention in the intro who or what Disra is. At the moment it is unclear.- Addressed
You also need to mention what the "negotiation" is. --Eyrezer 00:50, 11 October 2008 (UTC)- Addressed. Thank you for the review. Pranay Sobusk ~ Talk to me 09:32, 12 October 2008 (UTC)
- From the squadron briefing of Cavalier One:
In the intro, mention should be made of Darth Vader's deployment to Shelkonwa to lead the search.- Addressed
Mention should be made of Chivkyrie's social standing within the Adarian caste system at the start of the biography.- Addressed
What question did Leia pose that caused Disra to leave the meeting?- Addressed
They fled and, against their will, he stayed on his home planet with Organa. - against who's will? did Chivkyrie want to leave the planet as well?- Addressed
Then, he brought her to a tapcaf run by the Mungra Vicria, where he had got her a job before. - do you mean that Leia was working at the tapcaf prior to the meeting with Disra, and that Chivkyrie arranged it? If so, this needs to be mentioned earlier in the article.- Addressed
Context is needed on how Organa attempted to save a child in the night.- Addressed
Context is needed on the catacombs - where are they, etc.- Addressed. Thank you for the review and especially for cleaning up. The things you said are still some weaknesses I have, but I'm working on it. Pranay Sobusk ~ Talk to me 20:09, 13 October 2008 (UTC)
- Nice to see a new user on the GA page - however, I would check your word usage and grammar. There were several missing words, or words used in place of others that had similar meaning but were not quite correct. Although I understood the majority of the article, other readers may have difficulty. I have cleaned up the article, and encourage you to take a look at the changes to better understand what I mean. This is not meant as discouragement—far from it—and I hope you do not take it as such. - Cavalier One(Squadron channel) 12:10, 13 October 2008 (UTC)
- From the Somewhat Well-lit Bedroom of IFYLOFD
Provide context on who Darth Vader is.- Addressed.
Who are Aurek, Besh and Cresh? Provide context.- Addressed.
Unsourced. Add references to your infobox and everything else.Do we have quotes for Biography and Personality and traits?- I only found a good one for Personality and traits.
Check the article for spelling mistakes, please.- Addressed. Thank you for the review.
Get that done, and you have my vote. IFYLOFD (And now, young Skywalker, you will die.) 02:12, 19 October 2008 (UTC)
Still not sourced. Source infobox and the main body and you'll have my vote. QuiGonJinnThe ability to speak does not make you intelligent. 13:59, 18 November 2008 (UTC) - Addressed. Thank you for the review. Pranay Sobusk ~ Talk 15:12, 18 November 2008 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps Chack Jadson (Talk) 23:19, 20 November 2008 (UTC)