- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Yavin triumph ceremony (Kashyyyk)
- Nominated by: LelalMekha (talk) 12:18, September 12, 2012 (UTC)
- Nomination comments: For Wookiees do not care for medals—but I do care for good articles.
(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
Support
I bet Luke was pissed that he didn't get a jungle party. IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 20:31, September 19, 2012 (UTC)- Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 09:12, October 9, 2012 (UTC) - Clone Commander Lee Talk 09:33, October 9, 2012 (UTC)
Using my inqvote under the assumption that Cav and Floyd meant to use their AC votes. :P Menkooroo (talk) 14:43, October 18, 2012 (UTC)- Good job.Commander Code-8 To say hi, press 42 21:20, October 18, 2012 (UTC)
Object
One small thing
In the last sentence of the intro I think it should be mentioned that the Death Star was destroyed at Yavin since it was why the battle was so important. Nothing more than that.Commander Code-8 To say hi, press 42 05:20, October 18, 2012 (UTC)- I tried to address your objection. See if you fee that's good enough. --LelalMekha (talk) 14:14, October 18, 2012 (UTC)
- I do fee that its good enough:P. Commander Code-8 To say hi, press 42 21:20, October 18, 2012 (UTC)
- I tried to address your objection. See if you fee that's good enough. --LelalMekha (talk) 14:14, October 18, 2012 (UTC)
Chewie
I have an objection that's similar to Code-8's, but also the exact opposite: The intro mentions the Galactic Empire, but the article body only mentions the destruction of the Death Star and doesn't mention the Empire at all!The Battle of Yavin isn't explicitly mentioned in the article body, either, but it seems like necessary context for "Heroes of Yavin" to make sense.- Added. --LelalMekha (talk) 14:14, October 18, 2012 (UTC)
"which brought honor to Chewbacca and his entire race" --- "species" should always be used instead of "race."- Changed. --LelalMekha (talk) 14:14, October 18, 2012 (UTC)
"but never made any real appearance in a novel or comic book." This sentence is a little odd --- novels and comics aren't the only forms of SW media; there are TV shows, movies, radio dramas, RPG adventures, sourcebooks, encyclopedias, etc, etc. Narrowing it down to novels and comics is a little misleading.- Reworded. --LelalMekha (talk) 14:14, October 18, 2012 (UTC)
Building off of that last objection --- "Behind the scenes" seems incomplete without mentioning that the interview was mentioned in Behind the Magic. Even though it never made any real appearance in a novel or comic book, it was mentioned in an official CD-ROM. This seems like an important addition onto that last sentence.Menkooroo (talk) 08:31, October 18, 2012 (UTC)- Added. --LelalMekha (talk) 14:14, October 18, 2012 (UTC)
One more I just noticed --- the "History" section has an odd pipelink: [[0 BBY|0 ABY]]. 0 BBY and 0 ABY are actually two different years, so you'll need to choose one. I think 0 BBY is correct for the Battle of Yavin, as 0 ABY seems to only begin after the battle is finished. In that case, make sure to mention and link 0 ABY later in "History" as the date of this ceremony (and source it to the NEC or something).Menkooroo (talk) 14:33, October 18, 2012 (UTC)- Fixed. --LelalMekha (talk) 14:40, October 18, 2012 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 14:40, October 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Is the attribution in that BTS quote correct? Darth Trayus(Trayus Academy) 20:50, September 19, 2012 (UTC)
- Oh, good Lord, you're right! It's not correct, of course. I've just fixed it. Thanks for pointing out. --LelalMekha (talk) 20:53, September 19, 2012 (UTC)