Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/XoXaan

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XoXaan

• Nominated by:—Tommy ^{(Nine two eight one)} 02:22, 12 February 2009 (UTC)

• Nomination comments: Is she Human, or is she dancer?

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. You beat me to her :-P. Grunny ^(Talk) 12:38, 12 February 2009 (UTC)
2. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is a lie)} 08:59, 13 February 2009 (UTC)
3. Looks good. Master Jonathan^{Jedi Council Chambers} 04:15, 16 February 2009 (UTC)
4. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 22:36, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
5. Cylka^-talk- 11:32, 23 February 2009 (UTC)
   • Sounds good to meUser:Ason Trayon Feb.24,2009—Vote removed as per voting policy decision
6. DC 23:24, 24 February 2009 (UTC)

Object

• The CSWE starts her entry with "An ancient Sith Lord noted for her skills as a healer." (emphasis mine) The article states nothing about her being a healer. I think this should at least be mentioned in a simple P&A. Master Jonathan^{Jedi Council Chambers} 01:37, 16 February 2009 (UTC)
  • OK, saw it in recent changes. Good enough. As long as it's mentioned. Master Jonathan^{Jedi Council Chambers} 04:15, 16 February 2009 (UTC)
    • Again, many thanks.—Tommy ^{(Nine two eight one)} 04:29, 16 February 2009 (UTC)

1. Cool like Joe Montana:
   • "XoXaan was noted amongst her peers for her skills in dark side healing." this bit in the intro is pretty unrelated to surroudning info, and should be placed elsewhere so it doesn't jump out at you so suddenly. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 00:17, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
     • Addressed.
   • Context on the Vong in the Bio.
     • Addressed.
   • I think you could do a P&A, using stuff about her healing skills, and some of the info you included in the P&T section (which would fit better in a P&A section, IMO).
     • Addressed.
   • Otherwise, nice. Chack Jadson ^(Talk) 00:17, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
     • Pleasure doing business, JC.—Tommy ^{(Nine two eight one)} 05:27, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
2. Cylka:
   • Her species and sex needs to be added into the article body.
     • Addressed.
   • There are some linking issues, mainly some are in the intro, but not in the main body. I tried to catch all of them, but some, such as Sith cult, I wasn't sure how you would like to pipelink that.
     • Addressed. I did remove the Sith cult part, since XoXaan was the Sith, and not a cultist.
   • XoXaan and her associates - This makes them sound more like criminals, than Dark Jedi. Maybe a different word would work better.
     • Addressed.
   • However, Hett tried to feign his status as a Sith acolyte; he only sought to learn enough - I'm not exactly sure how one can feign their status as a Sith acolyte. Especially since Krayt stayed with her for years. Maybe I'm missing something, but this may be confusing to a casual reader.
     • I switched it up a bit, see if it is satisfactory please.—Tommy ^{(Nine two eight one)} 01:13, 18 February 2009 (UTC)
   • When Hett completed his training under XoXaan, he exited her tomb prepared to execute his vengeance mission against Darth Sidious - You might want to think about taking vengeance out of here, or otherwise giving it some context. It's a bit random here.
     • Addressed.
   • Another good article, Tommy. Cylka^-talk- 23:30, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
     • The pleasure is all mine, Cylk. Thank you, and please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy ^{(Nine two eight one)} 01:13, 18 February 2009 (UTC)
3. DC
   • Find something to section the first part of the Biography under.
     • Addressed.
   • How do you know the exact date in which XoXaan began to train Hett?
     • That was actually the year that Hett returned to Korriban, so I removed its mention.
   • Mention how XoXaan had known Muur, and how Krayt used XoXaan's history to find out more information about Muur.
     • Added a bit about XoXaan's allegiance with Muur; however, Krayt did not use her history to find out info about Muur. Wyyrlok merely stated that she may have been one of his homies. Let me know if anything further is required here.—Tommy ^{(Nine two eight one)} 01:03, 20 February 2009 (UTC)
   • In the P&T, nothing is stated about how XoXaan wanted her apprentice to be, and trained Hett because he was like this.
     • Addressed.
   • Have fun DC 04:57, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
     • Always do. Thanks for the review, DC. Please advise if anything further is required.—Tommy ^{(Nine two eight one)} 01:03, 20 February 2009 (UTC)

Comments

• No P&A.
  • Lies! :P DC 04:57, 19 February 2009 (UTC)
• Referred to as Master & teacher with regards to Krayt because that is how he (and everyone else concerned) referred to her.
• No sources, unless she is in CSWE and I don't know about it.
  • She is in CSWE, and I added it. Master Jonathan^{Jedi Council Chambers} 01:37, 16 February 2009 (UTC)
• Just over a g.
• Enjoy!—Tommy ^{(Nine two eight one)} 02:22, 12 February 2009 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 23:24, 24 February 2009 (UTC)