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XLT-014 labor droid

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Support

  1. <-Omicron(Leave a message at the BEEP!) 01:08, April 30, 2012 (UTC)
  2. Transformers! ~SavageBOB sig 22:41, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
  3. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 22:21, June 10, 2012 (UTC)
  4. ACvote IFYLOFD (Floyd's crib) 02:31, June 11, 2012 (UTC)
  5. ACvote—Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 15:33, June 11, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Savaged…
  • I think the lead is giving too much extraneous information. Rather than saying it was produced in the decades before the Clone Wars, and then explaining what those were for the next ten words, maybe pare it down to say they were produced in the decades before 22 BBY?
    • I changed it in the intro, but I left it the way it was in the History section to have some difference between the two.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 20:09, May 13, 2012 (UTC)
  • In the lead, you mention they could cause problems, but leave it at that. Perhaps add at least one example? In the "Role" section too.
    • The only story/example I have available is the droid on the cruise ship. I added a mention of this in the intro.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 20:09, May 13, 2012 (UTC)
      • It sounds like these are two different things. The droids can cause problems by misreading labels or being overconfident, according to the "Role" section. However, the droid on the cruise ship sounds like it was reprogrammed by the pirates, which is no fault of its own. Am I misreading this? ~SavageBOB sig 18:46, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
        • What I was trying to say was that the only example of anything that the droids did was the events of the cruise ship. The fact that they cause problems is mentioned, but it is not elaborated on. Sorry for the confusion.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 20:40, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
          • OK, this is my final suggestion, and I'll leave it to you whether you want to adopt it or not. If I were you, I'd revert to the version of the lead before you added the bit about the reprogrammed droid there. To me, it sounds like the lead is implying a link between problems with limited intelligence and the reprogrammed pirate droid, but I don't think those things are connected. I think it was better before I asked you to change it, so sorry about that. :) ~SavageBOB sig 22:41, May 29, 2012 (UTC)
  • Not sure if we can assume that all of them were yellow with blue sensors, since that seems customizable. Maybe say that some of them had those colors?
  • Their height and their sensor seem unrelated to me, so I'd rearrange the info so they're not in the same sentence. Maybe move the blue sensor bit down to the part where you talk about their sensory capabilities?
  • Add red to the infobox since at least some of them had red heads?
  • I'd add that their repulsorlifts gave off a blue glow when in use.
  • A few words of context are probably necessary for heuristic processor. You can crib from the RX-24 article for that if you want. :)
  • Is Bestine's galactic location pertinent? I'd be tempted to ditch it. That's it. Nice work! ~SavageBOB sig 14:56, May 13, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 15:33, June 11, 2012 (UTC)