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Whisperbird (Chiss light cruiser)

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Support

  1. I can't wait to read about the SCREAMINGBIRD, naturally would have to be all caps as well! Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 04:29, 3 October 2022 (UTC)
  2. Coming 2023 in Timothy Zahn's Eli Vantoncy: Sorting Kilji data rectangles, the story of the SCREAMINGBIRD. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 19:36, 25 October 2022 (UTC)
  3. Inqvote JediMasterMacaroni(Talk) 01:24, 26 October 2022 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Commander Code-8 Hello There! 01:38, 27 November 2022 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Ayrehead02 (talk) 16:37, 28 November 2022 (UTC)

Object

The Kiljis destroyed the Grysks
  • Intro: Context for Grysk, Yiv, Nikardun Destiny, Thrawn, Primea.
    • done.
  • Battle over Primea shouldn't be capitalized.
    • fixed
      • This remains. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 15:06, 16 August 2022 (UTC)
        • done
  • the Whisperbird was fought at the – please fix this sentence.
    • done
      • No. It still reads as mentioned above, remove the was.
        • done
  • Body: Nikardun Destiny, Yiv, Vak Combine. (in their first mention)
    • Yiv is self contextualizing. rest are done.
  • "Thrawn's last stand" should be its full name "Senior Captain Thrawn's last stand."
    • done
  • Jixtus is not a commander. The only commander in the Thrawn books I remember is Uingali. Jixtus is an agent and coordinator of the Grysks per Crofyp. (And he's not their leader, either)
    • fixed
  • Date note should be pipelinked (this must be applied to all your Ascendancy noms and status articles) per precedent. (Kilji data rectangle, for example, and all my CAs.)
    • CR date note is less than 3 lines so it can be kept as is. LE date note pipelinked.
      • Doesn't matter. The CR date note will have to be pipelinked. (Precedent aside, I was told to do this by several users...)
        • i was told that if its less than 3 lines in standard view it can be kept as is by another user. changed, anyway
  • Please establish that it was in fact the Kilji war cruiser Whetstone which destroyed the FateSpinner. (Needs to be mentioned) Or did floating Kilji defectors go across the Sunrise system destroying Grysk warships? :P Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 08:35, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
    • disagree. neither of those ships are relevant to the Whisperbird, nor previously mentioned. its a space battle. obviously the Kilji were in a ship. I didnt mention that the Vak, Paccossh, and Garwian's were in ships, so why the Kilji?
      • Because you refer to the rest as nations, while you establish the Illumine defectors (THEY ARE NOT DEFECTORS.) as defectors (individuals). Please amend this. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 15:06, 16 August 2022 (UTC)
        • the Illumine also fit under the nations bit of context. they were part of Jixtus's fleet. then they turned against his fleet. ergo, they defected from his fleet. nowhere is it mentioned or implied that they were individuals.
          • The vassals never were part of Jixtus' fleet. No Kilji was. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 19:15, 16 August 2022 (UTC)
  • Oh, and, the Kilji species aren't a nation, the Kilji Illumine is :P Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 08:36, 11 August 2022 (UTC)
    • fixed BloodOfIrizi Sabine Starbird (talk) 18:50, 15 August 2022 (UTC)
      • Remove the defectors part.
        • done
  • "all nations that resided in the Unknown Regions that Thrawn had crossed paths with in the past.[1]" the part about Thrawn is unnecessary. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 15:06, 16 August 2022 (UTC)
  • The sectioning in history is unnecessary. See Crofyp's task force, which has four paragraphs and an image with no sectioning, for example. There isn't enough content for sectioning there. Samonic ChissAscendancyCanonSymbol 19:22, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
  • The Whisperbird didn't fight in the beginning of Thrawn's Yiv's conquests, but at the end. Please amend this.
  • Introduce Thrawn's full name.
  • Quotes aren't spoken in Basic, please introduce translated=1.
  • You refer to Thrawn as "Senior Captain Thrawn" repeatedly, please amend this as well. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 16:32, 15 September 2022 (UTC)
  • "anet Sunrise, the final attempt of the Grysk coordinator Jixtus' to destroy the Chiss Ascendancy." the battle isn't stated to be the final attempt, in fact, the Whetstone and Jixtus's fleet would be going into the Ascendancy after killing Thrawn. Please reword. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 20:57, 15 September 2022 (UTC)
  • Missing link to standard year, commanding officer in the intro.
  • Please note Sunrise is not an official name.
  • "warlike species Grysk forces at Thrawn's last stand." This doesn't read well. Perhaps "one of the warlike Grysk species' fleets."? — this will have to be changed in the body and intro.
  • Missing link to weapon in the body.
    • done BloodOfIrizi Sabine Starbird (talk)
      • Sunrise was known to the Chiss as Sunrise, it was known to their people by another name. Samonic Signatureicon (Talk) 19:00, 24 October 2022 (UTC)
        • changed to 'nicknamed', i dont think its worth mentioning that the nickname was given by thrawn/chiss as the article is chiss-centric but if you disagree lmk BloodOfIrizi Sabine Starbird (talk) 21:53, 24 October 2022 (UTC)
Manoof
  • "eventually emerging victorious against the Nikardun Destiny." is this saying that the Stingfly/Grayshrike were victorious over the cruiser, or the overall battle was a victory? Manoof (he/him/his) (talk) 12:55, 1 October 2022 (UTC)
Thrawn
Ayrehead
  • Seems like the spectrum lasers, plasma spheres, and breachers could be listed in the armaments section of the infobox and the electrostatic barriers listed in countermeasures or possibly other systems. Ayrehead02 (talk) 09:42, 27 November 2022 (UTC)

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