Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Vul Tazaene

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Vul Tazaene

Nominated by: Hanzo Hasashi 21:41, December 30, 2011 (UTC)
Nomination comments: Wonder if this shiny headed man constantly objected to all Jabba's plans.

Just one thing for now: In the infobox, you say he was affiliated to Jabba the Hutt. I don't see how, just because he was there at the time of Luke's visit to the palace. Is there something I'm missing that specifically states that he was affiliated with Jabba?--Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 01:46, December 31, 2011 (UTC)
- You are correct, there isn't. Removed. Hanzo Hasashi 04:16, December 31, 2011 (UTC)
~~One more thing: I think you should make a brief mention of what he was wearing at the time.~~--Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 01:47, December 31, 2011 (UTC)
- Done. Hanzo Hasashi 04:16, December 31, 2011 (UTC)

~~"None" should not be in the infobox. I'm fine if you leave a note that he is bald in the P&T.~~
- Fixed. To be honest, I just didn't know what to do with hair color for bald individuals in their infoboxes.
and Alliance to Restore the Republic Commander: While this is the correct title of the Rebel Alliance it makes it difficult to read. Please change it.
- This fixed too. Hanzo Hasashi 15:45, December 31, 2011 (UTC)
Otherwise very good work. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 10:22, December 31, 2011 (UTC)

Intro: "By 4 ABY, he was looking for the Tonnika sisters, a pair of twin con artists and had also fallen in love with one of them, though he was not sure if it was Brea or Senni Tonnika." This sentence reads awkwardly, like you're trying to cram two thoughts together. Splitting them up should work.
- Two separate sentences now.
~~Additionally, you should mention them to be identical twins to explain why he didn't know which one he fell in love with.~~
- Done. Hanzo Hasashi 05:41, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
That's all. Good work. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 03:00, January 2, 2012 (UTC)

In the intro, I have a bit of an issue with referring to Skywalker and Solo by their Rebel command ranks. Firstly, are we sure that Luke even still held the Commander rank at that time? And Han wasn't even a formally commissioned member of the Rebellion by then, despite additions to canon like Renegade Squadron. He received, or re-received, his General commission right before the Endor operation. But regardless, their affiliation to the Rebellion really has no relevance to the events in this article, since this was not a military-backed operation. I don't mind if the article refers to Luke as being a Rebel, but anything else, particularly in relation to Han, is just sort of unnecessary if you get what I'm saying.
- Just decided to cut all mentions of them being Rebels period.
I like the way the article is written, but I have some hangups with how identical some of the wording is between intro and bio. There are three or four places where the sentences are literally verbatim. See if you can't mix some of them up a little bit.
- I think I changed them all.
~~Have you checked Behind the Magic and the ROTJ PhotoComic? Those are the two sources, specifically, I would think might picture this guy in some way.~~ Toprawa and Ralltiir 05:21, January 4, 2012 (UTC)
- Not in PhotoComic, not sure about BTM. Hanzo Hasashi 05:58, January 4, 2012 (UTC)
  - Pictured in Behind the Magic. Added. Hanzo Hasashi 17:21, January 4, 2012 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 22:38, January 6, 2012 (UTC)