Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Villpu Nagg

The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.

Villpu Nagg

• Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:47, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Storm of Khorm Part 2

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Pre-nom reviewed. Master Jonathan ^{(Jedi Council Chambers)} 17:51, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
2. Indeed. Toprawa and Ralltiir 18:54, October 14, 2010 (UTC)
3. 1358 ^(Talk) 18:35, October 16, 2010 (UTC)
4. Cylka^-talk- 04:21, October 18, 2010 (UTC)
5. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 23:25, October 23, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Toprawa

• Would it be appropriate to pipelink Slicer into "slice" here? I would have done it myself, but I'm not exactly sure of the context in which this being used: "they sliced the box and changed the coordinates of the storm" Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:28, October 13, 2010 (UTC)
  • Linked. Thank you for the review. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:43, October 14, 2010 (UTC)

Xd1358

• "The Republic, however, managed to land several units on Khorm, and Nagg was then contacted by Warlord Unger Gout, who informed him that two Jedi were on the way to destroy the station. Nagg was ordered to create a storm strong enough to kill the Jedi." Rather choppy. Could you split up the first sentence, and merge it with the second sentence: "The Republic, however, managed to land several units on Khorm, and Nagg was contacted by Warlord Unger Gout. The Warlord informed him that two Jedi were on the way to destroy the station, and Nagg was ordered to create a storm strong enough to kill the Jedi."
  • Fixed.
• "The station was built on the Kafiri Mountain and created storms to prevent Republic forces from landing and capturing the agrocite mines." That almost sounds like that the station automatically created storms. Perhaps "…and was able to create storms capable of preventing Republic forces from landing…"?
  • Fixed.
• "Warlord Unger Gout, the Confederate commander, then contacted…" Be careful when using 'the'. It currently sounds like you have introduced him before.
  • Fixed.
• That's all from me. 1358 ^(Talk) 18:18, October 16, 2010 (UTC)
  • Thanks. Good that you're back. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 18:25, October 16, 2010 (UTC)

Soresu

• Jedi Generals Kit Fisto and Plo Koon then decided to destroy the weather-control station in order to allow more reinforcements to land. You haven't yet established that they were leading or even part of the force that landed.
  • Fixed.
• Pretty nice otherwise. SoresuMakashi^{(Everything I tell you is the truth)} 08:51, October 18, 2010 (UTC)
  • Thank you. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 17:47, October 18, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 02:55, October 24, 2010 (UTC)