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Victory-class Star Destroyer

  • Nominated by: —Tommy-Macaroni Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 16:01, February 16, 2018 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: The intro pushed it over. From original nom: "A prize to anyone who can guess the pattern in my nominations."

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Great work!--Vitus InfinitusTalk 17:52, February 22, 2018 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:04, March 17, 2018 (UTC)
  3. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 16:07, March 18, 2018 (UTC)
  4. grunny@wookieepedia:~$ 18:15, March 20, 2018 (UTC)
  5. ACvote MasterFredCommerce Guild(Whatever) 23:02, March 31, 2018 (UTC)

Object

Vitus
  • In the intro, I think it would be better to fully link Republic Navy, Galactic Empire, Imperial Navy--Vitus InfinitusTalk 05:54, February 22, 2018 (UTC)
  • Sentinel Base, a lookout station that monitored supply shipments going to the Death Star battle station, was, before it was expanded, a prefabricated base deployed from a[1] Republic military[2] Victory-class.[1] I think this could be better written, like possibly add before it was expanded to the beginning of the sentence rather than have it in the middle. I think that would flow better.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 05:54, February 22, 2018 (UTC)
    • I put it at the end so the subject matter (the Victory) is more prominent. Is that okay?—Tommy-Macaroni Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 17:49, February 22, 2018 (UTC)
  • In 14 BBY,[4] the landing field of the Coruscant Imperial Palace could accommodate for Victory-class Star Destroyers to land. I think this sentence could be slightly rewritten. Maybe something along the lines of could accommodate the landing of Victory-class Star Destroyers.--Vitus InfinitusTalk 05:54, February 22, 2018 (UTC
  • Thanks for your review Vitus!—Tommy-Macaroni Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 17:49, February 22, 2018 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • You should definitely create a Canon article for prefabricated garrison base, in accordance with its Legends counterpart.
    • Done. I removed the "prefabricated" bit, as that was my mistake and only the modules added after are described as being prefabricated.
  • All of this is pretty much completely extraneous to this article's subject. You should be able to wrap this paragraph up in one brief sentence without needing to detail all of this extra stuff: "Tarkin decided to deploy the Liberator to Nam Chorios to defend its mining colony and prison from the Carrion Spike, as that seemed the most likely target in the vicinity, and the deepdock itself was too heavily fortified to be attacked. However, the insurgents ultimately chose to attack Lucazec next."
    • Now cut down to one sentence.
  • Some reviewing notes:
    • Per the Manual of Style, I've revised the article where appropriate regarding proper instances of "Victory-class" versus "Victory class."
      • Okay, I think I understand this now. I'll have a go at changing my other noms to fit this.
    • Breaking up compound subjects into multiple links is discouraged. For example, link as [[Anakin Skywalker|Darth Vader]], not [[Darth]] [[Anakin Skywalker|Vader]]. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:51, March 15, 2018 (UTC)
  • Now that we have more physical details for the Victory-class, I'd like to see the Description section amended in the following ways:
    • The fact that the ship served in the Republic and Imperial Navies isn't really relevant to its physical description. Those details belong in the History.
      • Done.
    • I'm presuming "protruding structure on its dorsal hull" is meant to refer to what Legends identified as a communications tower. I'd like to see that described more along the lines of a "vertical structure rising from the command tower."
      • I intended the "protruding structure on its dorsal hull" to be the command tower itself, as that hasn't been confirmed in any of the media it's appeared in.—Tommy-Macaroni Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 20:27, March 26, 2018 (UTC)
        • If you don't want to call it the command tower, then I would suggest calling it the "central tower" instead, and then mention the structure rising vertically from that. "Dorsal hull" is too unspecific. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 20:29, March 26, 2018 (UTC)
          • How's that?—Tommy-Macaroni Imperial Emblem (TAKE A SEAT) 20:43, March 26, 2018 (UTC)
            • The Characteristics section doesn't need to explicitly call out the fact that the Victory-class Star Destroyer has a central command tower. Every Star Destroyer model has one. Simply identifying it as a Star Destroyer is sufficient. What this section should concentrate on is identifying the characteristics that deviate from normal Star Destroyer specs; i.e., the command tower's tower and those flaps. For that matter, you don't even need to say it's wedge-shaped -- again, all Star Destroyers are wedge-shaped. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:30, March 29, 2018 (UTC)
              • Okay that's fair enough, how is it now? Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 18:50, March 29, 2018 (UTC)
    • The Description should also mention the flaps (the atmospheric maneuvering surfaces in Legends) protruding from either side of the ship. That, along with that command tower structure, are basically the two most distinguishable features of the Victory-class. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:25, March 26, 2018 (UTC)
  • I'd like to see the paragraph dealing with Vader's Victories mention the fact that this is taking place during the Galactic Civil War. It wouldn't be a bad idea to work that into the intro as well.
    • Done.
  • Is there a reason we don't have an article for Vader's Star Destroyer mentioned there? Can we not just presume any ISD Vader is shown to be in command of to be the Devastator unless explicitly suggested otherwise by the story?
    • I should think so. Now added.
  • Why do we need the special ref for Star Wars 6 to source that class bit? Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 18:17, March 31, 2018 (UTC)
    • Because the only look at the ship we get in the Vader comic is one window and a meditation chamber; no exterior shots or anything to suggest it's an ISD, Tommy Imperial Emblem Macaroni 18:26, March 31, 2018 (UTC)
Ecks Dee
  • Any reason why the page isn't in Category:Galactic Republic starship classes? 1358 (Talk) 15:53, March 18, 2018 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 23:02, March 31, 2018 (UTC)