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VR-10 Cuirilla-Rayl Xylines-class spacetug

  • Nominated by: Skippy Farlstendoiro 04:13, August 6, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: My first ship! Yes, it's a sci-fi tugboat. The perfect ship for RPG player characters, poor guys.

(4 ACs/1 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 13:58, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
  2. ACvote A pleasure.--Tommy 9281 16:13, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
  3. ACvote One two Freddy's coming for you… -- Xd (Talk) 19:46, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 18:35, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
  5. --Tm_T (Talk) 19:05, September 11, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Cav
  1. I'm a little confused on the pricing issue. According to the infobox, 50,000 credits is the "new" price, and they were still being sold at that sum in 10 ABY. However, later, you say that the ship was obsolete by 0 ABY, and was no longer sold in mint condition. If the later is true, then why are they still being sold at the full "new" price? Is this a contradiction in the entries?
    • Easer that that: It was a typo. In my language, "ABY" is the abbreviation for before the Battle of Yavin. --Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:54, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
  2. The last line of the history needs some clarification: It later saw action when Seville kidnapped Shashay artist Crying Dawn Singer. Previously, you stated that Seville sold the ship to Alliance, but this sentence implies he used the Worthless Fool during the abduction. Some small clarification needs to be made to explain the situation. - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 08:27, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
"Three, four, better lock your door…"
  • Are there no specific links to the various starship classes you name in reference to the tug's capabilities? "mostly bulk transports, bulk carriers and container ships, to their specific bay."
  • "Pirate Yearo Seville installed two turret-mounted laser cannons, placing one in each of the tractor beam pylons, and one more in the bow of his spacetug." Does this mean there is a third laser cannon?
    • Lemme see. Yes, there are three, but two are "normal" laser cannons and the other is a "heavy" laser cannon. Specified.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:06, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
  • " Seville's vessel also had a highly precise Hansen FeatherTouch tractor beam unit and was adapted to accept a one-legged pilot." I would suggest restructuring this, because of your previous, contextualized use of "tractor beam pylons." Somehow work this out so that the context given by saying " Hansen FeatherTouch tractor beam unit" doesn't come off like a double-back.
    • I don't know if I've understood your request. Nonetheless, here you are.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:06, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
      • You got it, just one more thing. Any particular reason you don't specify the type of tractor beam in the infobox?
  • " the Xylines-class spacetug was introduced before 22 BBY." I assume you mean the galaxy, but if one person questions it, it stands to benefit from further clarification.
  • "A number of pirates found and ambushed spacetugs." This is really random at the point you have it. tell why did they did that or something.
  • "This starship first appeared in The Abduction (1992), a roleplaying adventure for West End Games' Star Wars: The Roleplaying Game." This use of tense is unacceptable, given the fact the ship type has a name.
    • Uh? Well, changed based on featured articles on ship models.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:06, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
  • Subsequent tense-shifting in the BtS.
  • There was a lot going on here that could have been eliminated through a good copyedit. You may want to solicit a few in the future.--Tommy 9281 04:12, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
    • I'm not sure if I've understood all of your objections, but here you are.--Skippy Farlstendoiro 13:06, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
      • You are an intelligent young man, Skip. Don't shortchange your ability to comprehend what I mean/meant; you nailed each of my points right on the head. Exemplary objection handling on your part, my friend.--Tommy 9281 15:53, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
Xd1358's spacetug
  • While I realize that {{cr}} was created for this purpose, I still think that you should type out 'Galactic Standard Credit': "Around 10 BBY, unused spacetugs were available on the open market for credits 50,000."
  • "The specifics for a non-modified tug were only provided in Pirates & Privateers (1997), which was called a "starfighter."" So P&P was called a starfighter? o_O
  • -- Xd (Talk) 18:55, September 4, 2010 (UTC)
Jujiggum
  • Can you put a first ID on the source(s) for the two alternate names?
  • There's currently some info that appears only in the infobox. Please add to the body.
  • In the opening quote he calls the officer a "worthless fool," and he just calls the ship "worthless." But in the body, you say he called them both worthless fools.
  • Also in the opening quote you say he unwittingly named the ship the Wothless Fool; but again, he just called it "worthless;" could you adjust the caption to be more factually accurate?
  • As a note, there was some severe underlinking. Please watch for this. Also, remember not to use punctuation in quote captions. Jonjedigrandmaster (Talk) 20:20, September 4, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:07, September 11, 2010 (UTC)