Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Unidentified assassin droid series

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Unidentified assassin droid series

• Nominated by: Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:22, June 14, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Finally found something I could do for the barn-burner.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Good work. 501st dogma^(talk) 13:38, June 15, 2012 (UTC)
2. Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 19:02, June 18, 2012 (UTC)
3. —Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 01:33, June 26, 2012 (UTC)
4. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 14:25, July 11, 2012 (UTC)
5. Menkooroo (talk) 03:18, July 26, 2012 (UTC)

Object

501st

• The first bit of the description about them being used by the TF during the Invasion should be moved to Histroy as it's history.
  • I disagree; they're TF droids and the article needs to establish that right away. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:59, June 14, 2012 (UTC)
    • A least add to the History that they participated in the invasion in 32 BBY by the TF, even if its a repeat from the Description. The History section should have all the history.
      • You know, you're right. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 13:06, June 15, 2012 (UTC)
• Greedy TF is POV, like I said before.
  • It was my impression that some pov is allowed if it's properly sourced. If I'm mistaken then I'll remove it. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:59, June 14, 2012 (UTC)
• Context for the Invasion in the History (after you've moved it from the Description). This should help explain some why the Jedi are there.
  • Fudged the wording a bit. Any better? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:59, June 14, 2012 (UTC)
    • It will be better once you have the full invasion context from the Description in the history, like I said above.501st dogma^(talk) 11:27, June 15, 2012 (UTC)
      • Added. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 13:06, June 15, 2012 (UTC)
• Context for Naboo in History.
  • Added context to Naboo's first mention. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:59, June 14, 2012 (UTC)
• Looks good. 501st dogma^(talk) 21:46, June 14, 2012 (UTC)
  • Thanks for looking it over. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:59, June 14, 2012 (UTC)
• One last thing. You say "When the Queen returned to the planet...". You never said she left the planet, so add a small bit a context, such as "Upon returning to Nabo from Coruscant....". 501st dogma^(talk) 13:20, June 15, 2012 (UTC)
  • Made some adjustments. How's that? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 13:35, June 15, 2012 (UTC)

Cav

• The Trade Federation,[1] a greedy, galaxy-spanning corporation,[2] - greedy is bit to POV-ish in my opinion.
  • Nixed. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 12:21, June 18, 2012 (UTC)
• The concept art image - is it significantly different to the actual in game model? If not, it may serve as a better infobox image. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 09:32, June 18, 2012 (UTC)
  • Thanks for looking it over. The art is a good likeness of the droid, but can it be an infobox image since it has all that stuff in the background? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 12:21, June 18, 2012 (UTC)
    • It might not if it's not an exact representation. I won't object on the usage of it as an infobox image in this case. - Cavalier One^{(Squadron channel)} 19:02, June 18, 2012 (UTC)

Assassin

• "red eye sensors..." does the term "eye sensor" come from anywhere? Aren't they photoreceptors?
  • I was looking for that link! Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:28, July 18, 2012 (UTC)
• In the "description" section, can you give a brief description of why cortosis is effective against Jedi? Seems relevant to note the how of them being Jedi-killers.
  • Added. How's that? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:28, July 18, 2012 (UTC)
• I think a little more context in "Behind the scenes" on the stuff from The Phantom Menace is needed. "Two of these droids escort Queen Amidala instead of battle droids." What kind of battle droids? Were there battle droids in the movie? It's also probably worth spelling out the film's title, as "the Episode I movie" is a little vague.
  • Added. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:28, July 18, 2012 (UTC)
• And... is it really that clear from the film that the Battle of Naboo takes place on the same day that they arrive back on the planet? I always kind of thought a day or so passed, personally... Is there any solid evidence that it all takes place under the same sun? Menkooroo (talk) 03:13, July 17, 2012 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the advice. Near as I can tell, it happens the same day. There's no solid evidence either way. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 21:28, July 18, 2012 (UTC)
    • If there's no solid evidence either way, then is it fair to say "clearly the Queen and entourage return to Naboo during the day and free the planet that same day." ? It might be best to leave it out if it can't be backed up by anything. Menkooroo (talk) 02:17, July 19, 2012 (UTC)
      • Nixed the clearly. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 00:32, July 21, 2012 (UTC)
        • It's actually the entire sentence that I think should go. Even without the word "clearly," it's still not backed up by anything and seems like little more than a guess. Menkooroo (talk) 16:30, July 21, 2012 (UTC)
• Okay, I started a KB thread about the timeline. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 03:26, July 24, 2012 (UTC)
  • From MJ's response, it seems there is no real indication of time, so here we have a situation where we can't say that there is, and we can't say that there isn't another day. So now what? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 03:17, July 25, 2012 (UTC)
    • The important thing here is that "we can't say that there is." If that's the case, then the sentence is really just guesswork. Since there's no indication that it is a continuity error, it should just be deleted. Menkooroo (talk) 16:34, July 25, 2012 (UTC)
      • Okay, I see your point. That begs the question, then, is the two-conflicting tag alright just for the one altered scene? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 23:47, July 25, 2012 (UTC)
        • For a minor little error like that, probably not. Menkooroo (talk) 02:26, July 26, 2012 (UTC)
          • Sure, I removed that as well. Thanks again. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 03:03, July 26, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 06:15, July 26, 2012 (UTC)