Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Unidentified Wookiee worker 2 (second nomination)

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Unidentified Wookiee worker 2

  • Nominated by: Commander Code-8 You lost the game! 09:38, March 25, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Guess who's back! Trying to make a return to semi-active editing and so thought I'd kick off with a nom I let slip by a while ago.

(4 ACs/3 Users/7 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 21:13, March 25, 2014 (UTC)
  2. Code was too addicted to the Wook to leave. :) 501st dogma(talk) 00:31, March 26, 2014 (UTC)
  3. Great to have you back :) Supreme Emperor (talk) 00:46, March 26, 2014 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Sir Cavalier of OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 13:16, May 7, 2014 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 00:36, June 9, 2014 (UTC)
  6. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 02:43, June 10, 2014 (UTC)
  7. ACvote Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 04:36, June 10, 2014 (UTC)

Object

Lee's charge
Exiled Jedi
  • Uh, a history section for a character article?
  • I'll give this a full review later.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 06:22, March 26, 2014 (UTC)
  • I feel like you go into a little too much play-by-play detail of the worker's actions. Could you condense things down slightly?
    • Not quite sure how to carry out this one.
  • Since you mentioned the worker's clothing please mention the belt and tools used by the Wookiee.
    • Done
  • You use the word "appeared" twice in the second sentence of the BTS. Please reword this.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 22:33, April 30, 2014 (UTC)
  • "The workers soon had gathered enough food to allow the base to support a fourth worker to join them, and once even more food was gathered another worker arrived at the base." Could you change one of the uses of gathered in this sentence?
  • While the worker's gender is not know, it is not technically proper to refer to the worker using "its."--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 04:05, May 25, 2014 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • This has absolutely nothing to do with the personality and traits of this Wookiee. Since you have nothing to legitimately populate a P/T section with, I would suggest cutting this section entirely and moving mention of his brown fur into the Biography: "A brown-haired Wookiee, the worker was trained to gather food, carbon, nova crystals and ore."
    • Done.
  • It's not proper grammar to use "them" or "their" as a substitute pronoun when an individual's sex is not known because "them" and "their" are plural, and this individual is singular. You will need to find a way to rewrite this to avoid pronoun use: "The Wookiee worker wore a belt and a piece of orange clothing that covered their torso and part of their legs."
    • I need help on this one, I have no idea how to do it.
      • You just need to be a little creative to avoid using pronouns. This involves referring to the individual with words that do not denote a specific sex, such as "his" or "her." A quick example off the top of my head would be "The Wookiee wore a belt and a piece of orange clothing that covered the worker's torso and part of the worker's legs."
        • Thanks, done.
  • I'm curious how the strategy guide is an indirect mention only for this unidentified character. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 19:08, June 6, 2014 (UTC)
    • I've always used the Imo tag when a character is mentioned in the strategy guide but isn't named, is this correct to do so? Commander Code-8 Felicitations malefactors! 23:14, June 6, 2014 (UTC)
      • Most of the time, no. Since conjecturally-titled subjects have no formal name, any mention of them in a source is going to be "indirect" by default. The only real exception would be, for example, if the strategy guide mentioned a "group of Wookiees" gathering resources. That would obviously refer to the four or five or whatever Wookiees being discussed in this article without directly referring to any specific one. It appears to me that it would be better to remove the Imo tag in this article. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 06:11, June 8, 2014 (UTC)

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