Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Unidentified Sith (Taalon's strike team)

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Unidentified Sith (Taalon's strike team)

• Nominated by: Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 12:55, December 18, 2011 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: From CAN to GAN. And WP:LE

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. After thousands of years of trying to take over the galaxy without really succeeding, you'd think the Sith would just give up and live peaceably. Meh, but then there would be no Star Wars.--Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 14:34, December 20, 2011 (UTC)
2. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:37, January 1, 2012 (UTC)
3. JangFett ^(Talk) 18:28, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
4. Menkooroo 21:57, January 6, 2012 (UTC)
5. Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 15:36, January 8, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Cal Jedi

• "to capture the dark side being Abeloth on her planet." - Her who? "Her" comes out of no where. It needs to be stated that Abeloth is Female before saying that it was "her" planet.
  • Added "female". Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 14:10, December 20, 2011 (UTC)
• "In 44 ABY, the Sith member was chosen to accompany High Lord Sarasu Taalon's convoy of eleven ChaseMaster frigates to ally with Jedi Grand Master Luke Skywalker for a mission to find the dark side being Abeloth before betraying and killing Skywalker and forcing Abeloth to serve the Sith Tribe." - This sentence seems to drag on and gets rather confusing towards the end. Who betrayed and killed Skywalker? Who forced Abeloth to serve the Sith Tribe? Things like this are not clear.
  • Better? Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 14:10, December 20, 2011 (UTC)
    • Sounds much better. Good job.--Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 14:34, December 20, 2011 (UTC)
• "the allied forces engaged her in combat." - Again, her who?--Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 21:53, December 19, 2011 (UTC)
  • Adressed like above. Thanks for the review. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 14:10, December 20, 2011 (UTC)

Toprawa

• Please reload infobox. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:27, January 1, 2012 (UTC)
  • Adressed. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 21:29, January 1, 2012 (UTC)

Jangeth

• I realize the article is small, but an image describing an event that is mentioned in the article could help the reader. JangFett ^(Talk) 17:57, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
  • Added a picture of Gavar Khai. Check it out. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 18:07, January 2, 2012 (UTC)

Mind drinking

• If I remember Allies correctly, doesn't every member of the Sith strike Mind Walk to Beyond shadows before they find Abeloth? Menkooroo 20:38, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
  • Nope, only Luke Skywalker, Sarasu Taalon, Gavar Khai and Leeha Faal do so. If you are unsure just check Jon's excellent article about the subject. Thanks for the review. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 20:58, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
    • Carry on! Menkooroo 21:57, January 6, 2012 (UTC)

Exiled Jedi

• "The Sith was Force-sensitive and very powerful, since Taalon had only selected the strongest Sith to accompany him on the mission to Abeloth's planet." This sentence kind of makes it sound like he was Force-sensitive and very powerful because Taalon had selected him. Please reword this sentence.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 23:43, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
  • Yes, that's the case. This sentence says that he had to be poweful, otherwise Taalon would not have taken him. Or is there another problem? Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 09:45, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
    • I reworded the sentence a bit. Have a look. Ah, and thanks for the review. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 09:50, January 3, 2012 (UTC)
      • It is worded much better now.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 15:36, January 8, 2012 (UTC)
• The Sith Armada is infobox exclusive.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 23:45, January 2, 2012 (UTC)
  • Oops, there it is, sorry.--Exiled Jedi (Greetings) 23:46, January 2, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 19:04, January 9, 2012 (UTC)