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Unidentified Rebel captain (Champion)

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

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  1. Just take a look at my copy-edit. Good job.--Cal JediInfinite Empire (Personal Comm Channel) 03:29, November 14, 2011 (UTC)
  2. Good work on adressing the few objections. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:54, November 15, 2011 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Cha-ching. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:10, November 18, 2011 (UTC)
  4. ACvote grunny@wookieepedia:~$ 15:58, December 10, 2011 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Bada-bing.—Tommy 9281 Saturday, December 10, 2011, 16:43 UTC

Object

Lee's charge
  • Please check the intro and the bio for redirects and remove them.
  • the Alliance was evacuating Echo Base, their formerly secret base. Could you give a synonym for base e.g. headquarters?
  • One passenger that the captain received on board the Champion was the Rebellion General Crix Madine. The captain of the Champion was about to make the jump to hyperspace: Why did they want to jump to hyperspace. As it stands there's a misising link between the two sentences.
  • when the Imperial I-class Star Destroyer Tyrant ordered him to surrender Madine: I do not think the the Star Destroyer ordered him to surrender Madine. Maybe the captain of the ship.
  • The captain refused to make a deal with the Imperial captain and launched X-wing and Y-wing starfighters to hold off the Tyrant so that the Champion could make the jump to hyperspace. The captain ordered the commando that had rescued General Madine to take an X-wing and join the fighters holding off the Star Destroyer and its fighters: Please bridge those sentences a little better. Also you begin twice with "the captain".
  • Can a captain really launch fighters? Or did he gave the order to lauch fighters?
  • That's all. Nice work. Clone Commander Lee Talk 15:38, November 14, 2011 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • This is a fairly sofixit objection, but I wanted to make note of it so you're aware of it for future articles. The Manual of Style currently requires ranks and titles to be capitalized in the instances in which the rank or title refers to the individual subject. For example, each mention of "the captain" should capitalize his rank. Please revise the article as appropriate. Toprawa and Ralltiir 21:18, November 16, 2011 (UTC)
    • Did I capitalize everything correctly? Also, does commando count as a rank?--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 02:15, November 17, 2011 (UTC)
  • Is the Tyrant not italicized in the intro quote?
    • No, but nothing is italicized in the mission texts for the game. Should I italicize it or leave it the way it is? --Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 23:49, November 17, 2011 (UTC)
      • Although obviously it should be italicized, it's probably better for us to stick to the original text and not italicize in this instance. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:10, November 18, 2011 (UTC)
  • We have a general article for Mon Calamari Star Cruiser, which more or less covers all models. Can we not link to this in the article in place of "Mon Calamari cruiser"?
  • Would it not be good to at least leave a redlink for this specific commando who boards the Champion with Madine?
    • Well, in the game the player has the choice of various different avatars depending on what cards they own. Some possible avatars that the player can use include Rachi Sitra and Coret Bhan, as well as other species avatars that the player can name and use for the scenario. Therefore, since the character could be a previously named character, or an un-named character, it doesn't seem like a good idea to create an article for a character that could already have one. However, if you still want me to create an article, I will do that.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 23:49, November 17, 2011 (UTC)
      • Very well. Sounds very similar to the ubiquitous "spacer" who exists in KOTOR gameplay, which we've basically decided not to create an article for. Probably best not to create one here either. Toprawa and Ralltiir 00:10, November 18, 2011 (UTC)
  • I'm sort of confused with the line of events in this sentence, which literally reads that the Champion escaped the Tyrant before its starfighter complement returned aboard. Should it not read that the fighters returned aboard and then it escaped the Tyrant? "The Champion soon escaped from the Tyrant, and, after the surviving Rebel starfighters returned to the ship, the Champion made the jump to hyperspace and eventually reached the rendezvous point."
  • The BTS refers to the "Mon Calamari Cruiser" Champion, while the rest of the article refers to it as the "Mon Calamari cruiser." Which is it? Toprawa and Ralltiir 09:37, November 17, 2011 (UTC)

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