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Unidentified OOM command battle droid (Naboo)

• Nominated by: Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 23:12, January 13, 2012 (UTC)
• Nomination comments: Never try to arrest a Jedi Master

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

1. Although a little bit context for the Theed Hangar would be appropiate. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 10:05, January 22, 2012 (UTC)
2. Looks good to Fred here. MasterFred^(Whatever) 15:06, January 30, 2012 (UTC)
3. Menkooroo 03:01, February 8, 2012 (UTC)
4. In 3D, too.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 02:30, February 15, 2012 (UTC)
5. IFYLOFD ^{(Floyd's crib)} 03:09, March 2, 2012 (UTC)

Object

Return of the Jedi

• Infobox needs to be reloaded.
  • Done...for future reference, how can I tell when an infobox needs reloaded? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 04:05, January 14, 2012 (UTC)
    • You just get used to it after a while. Most of the time, I can tell at a glance. If I'm not sure, I put a fresh infobox on top of the old one and compare it.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 05:11, January 14, 2012 (UTC)
• The Theed Hangar. Context: Where was it? (Capital city Theed of the planet Naboo)
  • Added. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 04:05, January 14, 2012 (UTC)
• Why was Qui-Gon and the others in the party leaving Naboo?
  • Added. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 04:05, January 14, 2012 (UTC)
• Context on the quote for the BTS. Why is it in the BTS? Maybe a note in the context saying why it's in the BTS.
  • How's that? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 04:05, January 14, 2012 (UTC)
• Probably more to come.—Cal Jedi ^{(Personal Comm Channel)} 23:44, January 13, 2012 (UTC)
  • Thanks for looking it over...and as Jinn would say "trust your instincts."

Lee's charge

• The OOM command battle droid contained adaptable programming.: Why is this in the intro?
  • It's my way of summarizing what's in the "Features and functions" section.
    • Yes, but that shouldn't be in the intro.
      • Very well, removed. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 15:28, January 15, 2012 (UTC)
• To link guarded to the Battle of Theed is discussable, as the engagement in the hangar was not part of the battle.
  • Well, there's a lot of stuff that happened in the Battle of Theed, from Amidala's capture to her escape. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 15:52, January 14, 2012 (UTC)
    • Hm, I'll agree. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 10:21, January 15, 2012 (UTC)
• More context for Invasion of Naboo, the Theed Hangar and his destruction.
  • "Trade Federation occupied the planet Naboo in 32 BBY to protest a trade dispute." Is that not context enough? Corellian Premier ^{All along the watchtower} 15:52, January 14, 2012 (UTC)
    • In the intro, there is the need for some more.
      • Better, worse? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 15:28, January 15, 2012 (UTC)
        • Better, but please state who destroyed the commander. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 14:29, January 16, 2012 (UTC)
          • Right, added. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 05:09, January 22, 2012 (UTC)
• In the infobox, the planet where he was destroyed should be mentioned. You can keep Theed, but add Naboo please.
  • Added. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 15:52, January 14, 2012 (UTC)
• Jinn then proceeded to destroy the command droid's subordinates, some of whom were guarding a group of Naboo Security Force pilots.: Not correct, they were destroyed by Kenobi.
  • Added Kenobi, since it was Jinn who destroyed 3B3. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 15:52, January 14, 2012 (UTC)
• More to come. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 09:50, January 14, 2012 (UTC)
  • Thanks for the review! Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 15:52, January 14, 2012 (UTC)

Halt.

• For chronology's sake, can you establish some details such as the presence of his subordinates and the pilot prisoners before going into the Qui-Gon slash stuff? The mention of the pilots at the end of the bio currently reads like a "by the way, he had previously been doing this" statement.
  • Sure, how's that? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower}
    • Great! Buuuut, "Jinn and his apprentice Obi-Wan Kenobi then proceeded to destroy the command droid's subordinates, to allow them to escape on the Queen's starship." reads as if the destroyed subordinates are escaping on the starship.
      • Ah, not anymore! Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 22:52, February 6, 2012 (UTC)
• This is pretty picky, but since the droid is more than (Picture only) on the CCG cards, "was also pictured in several cards" probably isn't the best wording.
  • Expanded. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 16:25, February 6, 2012 (UTC)
    • Truthfully, it seems like a bit of a long-winded explanation now -- "The droid was also pictured in several cards of the Star Wars Customizable Card Game, which also provided additional information about the droid." Can you see what you can do about making it only as long as it needs to be?
    • Nixed. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 22:52, February 6, 2012 (UTC)
• Did you check the manga? I can check it if you need me to.
  • Actually, no, since i only have the second half. Could you check it? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 16:25, February 6, 2012 (UTC)
    • I can do that later today.
      • He's not actually in the Photocomic. He is indeed in the Manga. He says "Where are you going?" and then Qui-Gon chops him like suey. Sorry for not logging in; my connection is bad enough right now that the extra effort of logging in would be unbearable. 184.7.236.143 02:33, February 8, 2012 (UTC)
        • And now it's picked up. It does that sometimes. Menkooroo 03:01, February 8, 2012 (UTC)
• Thanks again for checking that. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 03:24, February 8, 2012 (UTC)
• The CCG reference (ref [4]) doesn't specify its card name. Hey, that's all I have! Good work. Menkooroo 04:32, February 6, 2012 (UTC)
  • Thank you for looking it over. About the reference, I thought since there were a couple cards I would just have the CCG template for the ref. Should I remove the template or source each individual card? Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 16:25, February 6, 2012 (UTC)
    • Definitely source each individual card. If all of the info is on one of them, you only need to source one. Menkooroo 17:06, February 6, 2012 (UTC)
      • And done. Corellian Premier^{All along the watchtower} 22:52, February 6, 2012 (UTC)

Comments

• Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 03:09, March 2, 2012 (UTC)