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Unidentified Herglic criminal

  • Nominated by: Ayrehead02 (talk) 15:26, November 22, 2014 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Another sub nom for Anandra

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 00:54, December 5, 2014 (UTC)
  2. 501st dogma(talk) 19:24, December 18, 2014 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Winterz (talk) 23:02, January 6, 2015 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 01:58, January 10, 2015 (UTC)
  5. Supreme Emperor (talk) 05:26, January 10, 2015 (UTC)

Object

Floyd
  • "The criminal lifted the trooper into the area" Lifted the trooper into what area? IFYLOFD (Enter the Floydome) 04:29, December 3, 2014 (UTC)
    • That's meant to be air. Not really sure how I managed that.... Ayrehead02 (talk) 12:39, December 4, 2014 (UTC)
501st
  • The intro has her refusing the work before the trooper came, while the bio has her still discussing the deal when he comes. Please change it so both say the same thing.
  • "The Alderaanian then questioned why he had helped her, before the criminal swiftly left the scene." This sounds like she asked him why he saved her, and he left not answering, which is contrary to what the P&T says. 501st dogma(talk) 21:57, December 14, 2014 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • As a reviewing note, the article's formatting of the story's quotes was quite poor. In the future, please pay attention to all capitalization and punctuation in quotes and be sure to format them exactly the way a source does. In addition to correcting them, I moved them all into the main quote to stand together as a single exchange, as the entire quote is much more effective that way.
  • This is what's called a dangling modifier. Grammatically speaking, this sentence is literally saying that Anandra has black skin and eyes resembling oily quagmires. Please revise: "With black skin and eyes resembling oily quagmires, Anandra, who did not recognize the criminal's species, considered his appearance monstrous."
    • Fixed. Never heard of the dangling modifier before, I guess you learn something new everyday. Ayrehead02 (talk) 11:42, January 9, 2015 (UTC)
  • I find the final sentence of the BTS to be rather trivial. But more importantly, its statement is not self-sourcing, which means you should rightfully be adding references notes for every other Canon source that came out prior to this story's publication, which is rather impractical, in addition to referencing the bit about the Legends change. I would suggest just cutting it out entirely. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 05:25, January 9, 2015 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 05:28, January 10, 2015 (UTC)