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Unidentified Gotal traffic controller

  • Nominated by: —Jedi Kasra (comlink) 08:25, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: I present to you Part 1 of "The Idiots from Blood Ties #1!"

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

  1. —Master Jonathan New Jedi Order (Jedi Council Chambers) 20:28, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
  2. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:53, September 26, 2010 (UTC)
  3. Menkooroo 04:00, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
  4. ACvote Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:48, October 12, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote Cylka-talk- 14:40, October 13, 2010 (UTC)
  6. ACvote Do you seriously not know who Jango Fett is? 1358 (Talk) 07:41, October 17, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Lee attacks even the most stupid guys
  • Mention that Elmyo was a Human in the bio.
  • Possibly a mention that the rocket destroyed their ship. AS it stands it seems like the rocket him both directly.
    • I can see how that'd be confusing, fixed.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 20:31, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
  • Otherwise very nice. Have to return to my homework. Clone Commander Lee Talk 17:55, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
  • Same as the last objection above. Hope this creates not much confusion. :P Clone Commander Lee Talk 18:06, September 24, 2010 (UTC)
Unidentified CAN objector
  • I feel like the quote attribution might be better off mentioning all three people (and then leaving it at that) --- the current attribution is a bit misleading (as it leaves out two of the people it quotes), and reading the quote alone lets the reader know that Jango reveals his identity, ya know?
  • Super nitpicky, but we don't actually know anything about when this guy was born --- probably better just to say that he "lived" during the final decades.
  • Was he in any other panels in the comic? If so, that'd probably be a better choice for the article than a Jango image. I can probably help you out with that one. :^)
    • A couple, but I feel that they're not as important as showing who killed him and Elmyo.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:36, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
      • I'm going to disagree, but in a friendly rather than a vehement way. :^D Especially since the image falls in the "biography" section --- if there are images of the character, from the character's life, that are available, I think that they're always a better choice than an image of someone else. It is this guy's article, after all, not Jango's, ya know? Menkooroo 03:59, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
  • Hmmmm... should quote attributions be in present tense? Or would "killed him" be a better choice than "kills him", etc? Whaddya think?
  • That's all, baby! Menkooroo 14:40, October 4, 2010 (UTC)
  • One more: I feel like the intro should be shorter --- it reads nearly identically to the bio now. For a dude who was only on two pages of a comic, I don't really care about pbp in the bio, but the intro should probably be a bit more salient. Menkooroo 01:43, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
    • Done, and thanks very much for the image!—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 02:59, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
      • Cut out a bit more.
  • Sorry, but a couple more. Intro and body: Did Elmyo really "demand" that Fett begin negotiations? Considering how bored and disinterested he seemed, demanded doesn't really seem like the best word.
    • Replaced "demanded" with "suggested."—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 14:45, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
  • The "eventually" at the beginning of the bio's second paragraph seems off. We know nothing about what these two did in their lives before this scene, and "eventually" makes it seem like we do. Maybe "During that year" or something ... ?
  • That's it (for real!). I'll review Elmyo, too, but I feel like it'll be subject to pretty much identical objections, so I'll give you a chance to be proactive about it before I take a look. Cheers! Menkooroo 06:02, October 7, 2010 (UTC)
Xd1358
  • Could you start the intro with his gender and species instead of his job? What I mean is that he wasn't a traffic controller, it was his job.
  • Do you really think that a short article like this needs another image? (Check your image caption punctuation oif you decide to keep it).
    • It doesn't hurt, in my opinion.—Jedi Kasra (comlink) 00:36, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
      • Fine with me. 1358 (Talk) 12:13, October 5, 2010 (UTC)
  • More (possibly) later… 1358 (Talk) 15:12, October 4, 2010 (UTC)
Toprawa
  • Same as with Elmyo, please reload the infobox and fill in appropriate fields. Toprawa and Ralltiir 23:35, October 12, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 07:41, October 17, 2010 (UTC)