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Unidentified Elomin task force commander
- Nominated by: Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 11:50, February 12, 2010 (UTC)
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Support
- Good novel, good article. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 11:19, February 16, 2010 (UTC)
- Per Soresu--Loneshark1138
(Comlink Active) 11:12, February 16, 2010 (UTC)
Impressive how much you got out of a very brief appearance. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:37, February 18, 2010 (UTC)
--Eyrezer 08:23, February 22, 2010 (UTC)
Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:32, February 23, 2010 (UTC)
Object
- Soresu
(Moved from comments) Then put [sic] in the quote and add a note into the BTS about the error and how it is dealt with.SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 15:12, February 12, 2010 (UTC)- [Sic] added, and explanation included. Hopefully, it is clear enough. - Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 10:30, February 16, 2010 (UTC)
- [Sic] added, and explanation included. Hopefully, it is clear enough. - Cavalier One
- Toprawa:
The planet's library system is important enough to deserve a link both here and later in the History: "on the planet's extensive library facilities". The description from the Heir sourcebook should help: "The system is best known for its massive library, which is said to contain the gathered knowledge of the galaxy--if one knows where to look for it." This may in fact be the Celebratus Archive. Might need to look into this.- I've taken this to be the Celebratus Archive, and have linked accordingly. The descriptions appear to match. I'll look into in further, just in case, but Dan Wallace's blog comments seem to confirm it here.
- Cool, good enough for me. Toprawa and Ralltiir 22:32, February 23, 2010 (UTC)
- Overall you still have some troubling linking issues: not linking on first mention but linking on subsequent mentions, not linking at all for some, basic pipelinking issues, etc. Please continue to work on this. Please review the changes made during my copy-edit for specifics.
- One of these days I will get it right ...
- I've taken this to be the Celebratus Archive, and have linked accordingly. The descriptions appear to match. I'll look into in further, just in case, but Dan Wallace's blog comments seem to confirm it here.
Is "could-vee formation" terminology used in the book? "the Elomin commander ordered his task force to deploy in a symmetric could-vee formation"Toprawa and Ralltiir 04:55, February 21, 2010 (UTC)- The book said "cloud-vee formation." Graestan(Talk) 02:08, February 23, 2010 (UTC)
- Indeed it is "cloud-vee". Changed, linked, article created. - Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 14:53, February 23, 2010 (UTC)
- Indeed it is "cloud-vee". Changed, linked, article created. - Cavalier One
- The book said "cloud-vee formation." Graestan(Talk) 02:08, February 23, 2010 (UTC)
Comments
Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 22:32, February 23, 2010 (UTC)
- The intro quote would seem to indicate that the commander is an Elom, not an Elomin. The first part of the quote is a direct statement, but the second may have been an error on the part of the author/editor (perhaps they believed it was the plural?). Is it clear what species he is then? This probably deserves some BTW mention at the least. SoresuMakashi(Everything I tell you is the truth) 13:29, February 12, 2010 (UTC)
- The opening quote is verbatim from the source, but all later references refer to the "Elomin task force". Supplementary material, especially the Heir to the Empire Sourcebook makes it clear that the task force is crewed by the logical, horn headed Elomin. - Cavalier One
(Squadron channel) 13:49, February 12, 2010 (UTC)
- The opening quote is verbatim from the source, but all later references refer to the "Elomin task force". Supplementary material, especially the Heir to the Empire Sourcebook makes it clear that the task force is crewed by the logical, horn headed Elomin. - Cavalier One