Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Unidentified B1 battle droid (gundark nest)

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Unidentified B1 battle droid (gundark nest)

• Nominated by: Commander Code-8 ^{Felicitations malefactors!} 23:02, April 6, 2014 (UTC)
• Nomination comments:CAN that barely went passed the limit. You'd think a character with one line could be summed up in 250 words.

(3 ACs/3 Users/6 Total)

Support

1. 501st dogma^(talk) 21:34, April 8, 2014 (UTC)
2. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 20:29, April 13, 2014 (UTC)
3. Since I supported the CAN. Corellian Premier^{The Force will be with you always} 21:02, April 13, 2014 (UTC)
4. Sir Cavalier of One^{(Squadron channel)} 14:23, May 7, 2014 (UTC)
5. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 16:42, June 3, 2014 (UTC)
6. JangFett ^(Talk) 23:10, June 7, 2014 (UTC)

Object

501st

• Context on Kashyyyk
  • Done. Commander Code-8 ^{Felicitations malefactors!} 01:29, April 7, 2014 (UTC)
• Otherwise, good work. Welcome back :) 501st dogma^(talk) 23:46, April 6, 2014 (UTC)

Lee's charge

• A tiny bit of context for Wookiees in intro and body please.
  • Done. Commander Code-8 ^{Felicitations malefactors!} 10:39, April 13, 2014 (UTC)
• That is all. Clone Commander Lee ^Talk 12:52, April 7, 2014 (UTC)

Jangeth

• WP:DASH error in the infobox.
  • Think I've fixed it.
    • No. :P I took care of it, but please be careful in the future. WP:DASH explains it better, but here's my tl;dr version: For dates that have a beginning and an end (as seen in your infobox), use the endash. For open ended dates (i.e, 22 BBY-- ), use mdash. JangFett ^(Talk) 23:46, May 26, 2014 (UTC)
• Unfortunately, let's find a different source to replace the databank in the infobox. Because the databank no longer exists, it is unwise to use it, as there are other available sourcebooks out there. Did you look in NEGTD?
  • I have little to no access to any decent sourcebooks, so I don't know what has the necessary information.
    • I took care of this as well then. I accept all major credit cards for payment. JangFett ^(Talk) 23:46, May 26, 2014 (UTC)
• You said that the droid has Male programming in the infobox, and yet you keep saying "its" when you refer to it. You can say "his."
  • Fixed
• This needs clarifying—"On Alaris Prime the B1 battle droid and its squad were sent to attack the gundarks, a predatory species living on the moon, at their nest, where it was destroyed by members of the Wookiee species." You mention that the B1 battle droids were going to attack the gundark's nest but then it was destroyed by Wookiees? Why are there Wookiees on the moon? I honestly had to look it up and saw that the moon is in the Kashyyyk system. It would be wise to mention this somewhere in the intro and bio.
  • I've expanded on the Wookiee presence on Alaris Prime in the intro and mentioned the Kashyyyk system in the bio, is that okay?
• "the Trade Federation tried to colonize the moon Alaris Prime, despite the rights to do so being granted to the Wookiees, a species from the planet Kashyyyk, but upon their arrival the Federation was attacked by the gundarks, a non-sentient predatory species living there." Please check your grammar here.
  • Think I've fixed it.
• This article suffers from a lack of POV focus. I have no idea if the events in the bio are related to the B1 battle droid or not. Try to keep the pov on him wherever relevant. Saying "The B1 battle droid and..." will work. Try to say "B1 battle droid" since there's too many droids mentioned already.
  • Done.
• So the droids slaughtered the gundarks? Okay, then the intro needs to reflect this.
  • Done. Commander Code-8 ^{Felicitations malefactors!} 07:21, May 6, 2014 (UTC)
• More to come. JangFett ^(Talk) 13:56, May 1, 2014 (UTC)
• Fact tags in the bio. JangFett ^(Talk) 23:46, May 26, 2014 (UTC)
  • Fixed. Commander Code-8 ^{Felicitations malefactors!} 06:33, May 27, 2014 (UTC)

Toprawa

• "Intergalactic" means more than one galaxy. Does GB really state that the Trade Federation is literally an intergalactic entity? "the Trade Federation, an intergalactic corporation."
  • Nope, I was just using it not realizing the terms proper meaning. Changed to galactic. Commander Code-8 ^{Felicitations malefactors!} 10:24, May 30, 2014 (UTC)
• Reviewing notes:
  • Avoid using the word "unidentified" in the infobox, which I've seen you make a habit of. "Unidentified" is an OOU term and should be avoided whenever possible using pipelinking.
    • Thanks for that.
  • I've removed the "masculine programming" bit from the infobox as well as any gender-specific pronouns in the article. I don't think there's anything in Episode I, which is the source this article presumed to use to reference this information, that suggests gender-specific programming for B1s. That info may very well be correct, but it needs a proper source that suggests all B1s had masculine programming. Toprawa and Ralltiir (talk) 21:44, May 29, 2014 (UTC)
    • I don't know of any sources that do confirm this, The droid sounds pretty masculine when they speak, but I doubt this is enough to go on. Commander Code-8 ^{Felicitations malefactors!} 10:24, May 30, 2014 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 06:14, June 8, 2014 (UTC)

• Since my time here is limited atm, I'll check these objections next week sometime. JangFett ^(Talk) 19:23, May 16, 2014 (UTC)