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Tor Vizsla

  • Nominated by: Moon Demon 13:51, August 25, 2010 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Superior writing style, high level of detail, sufficient length, contains all relevent information from all available sources.

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:01, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
  2. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 07:57, September 3, 2010 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Cylka-talk- 04:08, September 21, 2010 (UTC)
  4. Good work. --Gmalek (The ability to edit does not make you intelligent) 15:38, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
  5. ACvote 1358 (Talk) 04:51, October 9, 2010 (UTC)

Object

Lee attacks
  • Death must be linked in the intro.
    • It already is linked, last sentence, second paragraph, in the Intro. Moon Demon 02:20, August 29, 2010 (UTC)
      • No this links to the Battle of Concord Dawn, not to Death.
        • Please look again. Battle of Concord Dawn is linked in the last sentence of the first paragraph with the phrase "seemingly killed". Death is linked in the last sentence of the second paragraph with the word "killing". Moon Demon 18:35, August 29, 2010 (UTC)
          • I meant to link it earlier in that paragraph. Please take a look. But nevertheless good work. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:01, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
            • Okay, I get what you meant now. Thanks. Moon Demon 15:15, August 30, 2010 (UTC)
  • Vizsla to Corellia where Fett destroyed his ship, the Death Rattle So Fett detroyed his own ship?
  • Please state something about Vizsla's origins in the Biography. Right now it starts without any info about Viszla.
  • Date for the battle of Concord Dawn?
  • Please use the name not the first name of persons throughout the article.
  • Context on the Death Rattle in the "Endgame" part.
  • Fett gave chase and they scuffled briefly before making their way down to the planet. How did they make their way to planet. Free-fall through space, escape pod, jetpacks?
  • Underlinking in the "Legacy" section. For example: Pre Vizsla, Death.
  • Kenobi came to Mandalore to investigate rumors that Kryze was building a secret army to fight for the Separatists Huh? I thought Kenobi was sent to Mandalore to explore the background about a Mandalorian who attacked a Republic cruiser.
  • Context on Cuy'val Dar.
  • Overlinking (Death Rattle).
  • Otherwise quite nice. If it passes GA, try for FA. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:05, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
    • Lee, things like one missing link is an easy sofixit. It takes a lot more time to write down the objection than to fix the thing yourself. -- 1358 (Talk) 16:15, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
      • I agree with you, Xd, but I want to point out this errors to Moon Demon, so that those mistakes can be avoided in the future. Clone Commander Lee Talk 16:18, August 28, 2010 (UTC)
  • Good job on fixing the objections. Clone Commander Lee Talk 13:04, August 29, 2010 (UTC)
Xd1358
  • Endgame quote needs {{quote}}, not {{dialogue}}, which is meant for three or more speakers. -- 1358 (Talk) 18:47, August 29, 2010 (UTC)
  • "Vizsla and the Death Watch later reappeared on Korda 6 where he managed to trap the True Mandalorians and kill Mereel as the Mandalore was betrayed by his second-in-command, forcing them to retreat." Who was forced to retreat?
    • Clarified. Moon Demon 20:18, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
  • Article for the final fight between Vizsla and Fett?
    • None exists. Moon Demon 20:18, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
  • The Dire-cats-attacking-because-of-blood is only in the intro.
  • 1358 (Talk) 19:11, October 8, 2010 (UTC)
Cav Watch
  • Intro: A little context for "Mandalore" is needed, especially as it could refer to the rank or the planet.
  • Hunting Jaster Mereel: Do we know any of the events leading up to the scattering of Mereel's forces across Concord Dawn? Such as why they were there, etc?
    • No we don't, just that Mereel claimed the title of Mandalore. Moon Demon 00:40, September 2, 2010 (UTC)
  • Hunting Jaster Mereel: Do we know why Fett's father sheltered Mereel?
    • Again, no we don't have a canon answer for why, just that he did. Moon Demon 00:40, September 2, 2010 (UTC)
  • Laying Traps: Why did Montross turn on Mereel?
  • Laying Traps: Second paragraph; you have four ref tags here; the first two are for "CSWE", the last two for "OS", meaning that the refs are repetitive, which is unneeded. Can these be combined for a single tag for each reference, or are the ref tags mixed up slightly and they should actually alternate? - Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 14:20, September 1, 2010 (UTC)
Jinzler
  • The name Tor translates to "justice" in Mando'a. You need to add a source for this --Jinzler 09:57, September 11, 2010 (UTC)
    • Sourced. Moon Demon 02:06, September 12, 2010 (UTC)
Cylka
  • he laid another trap for the True Mandalorians, now following Mereel's successor, Jango Fett, in which a strike team of Jedi were manipulated into slaughtering Vizsla's enemies for him. - This sentence is a bit confusing to read.
    • Clarified. Moon Demon 17:20, September 17, 2010 (UTC)
  • asserting that Mandalorians should conduct themselves honorably as nothing more than highly-paid mercenaries. - I'm not quite sure what you want to say here. Do you mean that they should conduct themselves better than mercenaries?
    • Clarified. Moon Demon 17:20, September 17, 2010 (UTC)
  • decimated more of Mereel's forces between them and the native Kordans. - Does this mean that the native Kordans were helping the Death Watch? Please clarify.
    • Clarified. Moon Demon 17:20, September 17, 2010 (UTC)
  • Is there an article for the Jedi killing the Mandalorians? If not, there probably should be.
  • Please source that there wasn't a leader before Tor in the succession box.
    • Sourced. Moon Demon 17:20, September 17, 2010 (UTC)
  • Please check the linking in the article. There was some over and under linking. I fixed what I saw, but please double check this.
    • Tried to catch some more. Not sure if I got it all, though. Moon Demon 17:20, September 17, 2010 (UTC)
  • Make sure that the info in the intro and the main article match up. For example, in the intro you state that Vizsla and Fett fought hand-to-hand.
  • Otherwise, nicely written article. Cylka-talk- 00:04, September 17, 2010 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 04:51, October 9, 2010 (UTC)


  • I've put in a significant amount of work to improve the quality of this article over the course of this year, so I hope it meets with approval. Moon Demon 13:51, August 25, 2010 (UTC)