Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Thermal detonator (second nomination)

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The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was unsuccessful. Please do not modify it.

Thermal detonator

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Support

  1. As nominator. Jedipilot94 *Fo-Shizzle* 20:29, 11 October 2007 (UTC)

Oppose

  1. From the, uh...Trap of Ackbar, I guess.
    • Not fully sourced.
    • I'm not exactly well educated on the subject, but I would think it could be expanded at least a bit more, if not significantly.
    • Some wonky sentences. Example: the first three in the main body.
    • Tense changes in some places.
    • Complete lack of detail.
    • Sectioning not the bestest.
    • Notable users is not the bestest either, and should go anyway.
    • Surely some better images could be produced.
    • More info on the various types of detonators.
    • Em dashes aren't meant to be surrounded by spaces.
    • No references from what is probably the prime source of information.
    • No references from what is probably the nest bestest source of information.
    • Could use some info on who (not individuals, but armies et cetra) used them.
    • Basically, it hasn't really a hope at GA, and none of the issues from the last nomination have been sorted. However I look forward to seeing how you deal with the objections.
    • And yes, I know bestest isn't a word.
  2. From the Forest of Goodwood
    • Infobox needs to be sourced.
    • Whole article needs to be sourced.
    • Please remove the "Notable Users" section - unneeded and smacks of "Trivia".
    • Introduction needs to be longer and broader in scope.
    • Technical Information" needs to be rewritten to conform to higher-quality prose.
    • Prose issues the whole article over.
    • Tense issues; all articles need to be written in the past tense per MOS.
    • TIMMMMMMBERRRRRR!!!--Goodwood Redstarbird (For the Rebellion!) 21:35, 11 October 2007 (UTC)

Comments

NOTE: THE FOLLOWING MESSAGE IS NOT B-S

  • Honestly, I can't contribute nearly as much at this time. Is there any way I could pull the nom, and work on it? I've got school, baseball, etc. and it's about to drive me postal. I am trying hard to get on as often as I can, but right now, I've got a list of crap to do bigger than the Death Star. I hope to be able to get back to my usual amount of editing (so what if it's not very much) very soon. I apologize for failing on my part, and hope to be forgiven. Jedipilot94 *Fo-Shizzle* 22:50, 15 October 2007 (UTC)
    • I don't think you need to be apologizing. Cut back your hours and take a pay cut. :) Work on this when you can and renominate it a few months when it's ready. Take care. -Fnlayson 23:06, 15 October 2007 (UTC)
      • Just remove this, keep the suggestions in mind, and work on it later. And don't feel bad about it. Chack Jadson (Talk) 00:12, 21 October 2007 (UTC)
        • Can this be removed, or are you still trying to get in GA'd? Chack Jadson (Talk) 22:21, 11 November 2007 (UTC)