Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Tensor rifle

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Contents

  • 1 Tensor rifle
    • 1.1 (3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)
      • 1.1.1 Support
      • 1.1.2 Object
        • 1.1.2.1 Headquarters
        • 1.1.2.2 Exiled Jedi
        • 1.1.2.3 Kilson
        • 1.1.2.4 Climbing up
      • 1.1.3 Comments

Tensor rifle

  • Nominated by: ~SavageBOB sig 03:05, August 5, 2011 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Don't buy from Galladinium; they're a rip-off!

(3 ACs/2 Users/5 Total)

Support

  1. Talrrivanian JaingHead (Headquarters)
  2. Galladinium offers more than three times the ammunition of the normal model. Good work, SavageBob.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 16:59, August 7, 2011 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Kilson(Let's have a chat) 16:26, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
  4. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 19:31, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
  5. Inqvote Menkooroo 02:30, August 16, 2011 (UTC)

Object

Headquarters
  • You have used excessive amounts of semicolens (;), I suggest changing some into seperate sentences. Good article Bob.--Talrrivanian JaingHead (Headquarters) 08:51, August 5, 2011 (UTC)
    • I've endeavored to remove the excessive semicolons; I'm sure you'll find the results to your liking; please take another look. ;) ~SavageBOB sig 14:02, August 5, 2011 (UTC)
Exiled Jedi
  • Galladinium's Fantastic Technology says that the weapon used a replaceable power generator (this is for the version that used fifty shots).
  • In the sources section, shouldn't you say where the weapon was first mentioned?
  • Other than these two objections, good work.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 11:53, August 7, 2011 (UTC)
    • The BTS is structured so that it mentions its publication in GFT as its initial publication. Is it not clear enough?
      • Whoops; figured out what you meant and fixed it. ~SavageBOB sig 15:42, August 7, 2011 (UTC)
    • The article mentions the replaceable power pack (which, unless I'm mistaken, is the same thing as the "power generator" you mention). ~SavageBOB sig 15:41, August 7, 2011 (UTC)
      • Other items in the same book mention standard power packs, but this weapon mentions a power generator. In my opinion the different name means that it is a different type of ammunition. I'm not seeing the mention of a replaceable power pack, where is this mentioned? The replaceable power generator is mentioned on page 90 of Galladinium's Fantastic Technology on the Ammo line of the item statistics.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 15:49, August 7, 2011 (UTC)
        • Arms & Equipment Guide and The Unknown Regions both note that it takes standard power packs, so if GFT treats its power as somehow different, it seems to have been retconned. ~SavageBOB sig 16:35, August 7, 2011 (UTC)
          • Well in Galladinium's Fantastic Technology the cost of the weapon and the number of shots the weapon gets are different from other sources, and since you mentioned these figures in the article, mentioning the different type of ammunition seems logical as well. Maybe its a variant of the standard Tensor rifle.--Exiled Jedi Oldrepublic crest (Greetings) 16:41, August 7, 2011 (UTC)
            • Hmm. Good point. Galladinium's higher price doesn't seem so outlandish in this light. Check it out. ~SavageBOB sig 16:49, August 7, 2011 (UTC)
Kilson
  • For some reason, the Wook's rifle article is exclusive only for slugthrowers. Since the tensor rifle is not a slugthrower, I'm not sure if you should link to rifle.
  • You have a bit of Infobox-exclusive info pertaining to the fact the weapon had a handle and foregrip. You could probably insert a brief mention in the Description section.
  • Otherwise, I can't wait to see your next article for the barn-burner. Kilson(Let's have a chat) 02:20, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
    • Good eye. I'm usually the one yelling at people to describe how things look. :) How's that? ~SavageBOB sig 03:03, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
      • I'm still not sure if you should link to rifle or not, although it does have "rifle" in its name. What do you think? Kilson(Let's have a chat) 11:20, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
        • Whoops; I got the link in the body but missed the lead. Try now. ~SavageBOB sig 14:10, August 10, 2011 (UTC)
Climbing up
  • "; the injury caused increased with time..." caused increased what? Menkooroo 15:20, August 15, 2011 (UTC)
    • Read, "the injury caused [by the rifle] increased with time..." Should it be clarified? ~SavageBOB sig 02:25, August 16, 2011 (UTC)
      • ahhhhh right right right my bad. Menkooroo 02:30, August 16, 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 12:19, August 16, 2011 (UTC)