Wookieepedia:Good article nominations/Tarkov

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Tarkov

  • Nominated by: Kilson Likes PIE 9:40, 28 June 09 (UTC)
  • Nomination comments: Weird, two Clone Wars Chapter 22 noms back-to-back. :P

(2 ACs/2 Users/4 Total)

Support

  1. ACvote Good job :P. Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi Beacon) 16:05, 28 June 2009 (UTC)
  2. Looks good after a copyedit. —Master Jonathan(Jedi Council Chambers) 01:28, 29 June 2009 (UTC)
  3. ACvote Cavalier OneFarStar(Squadron channel) 09:12, 22 July 2009 (UTC)
  4. MauserComlink 10:09, 22 July 2009 (UTC)
  5. ACvote CC7567 (talk) 00:04, 25 July 2009 (UTC)

Object

  1. Jujiggum attacks the PIE
    • "In 19 BBY, during the Clone Wars, Tarkov took his son Jaccoba hunting when they stumbled upon a large Separatist invasion army." This reads rather awkwardly, please rephrase.
    • I'd change around the first sentence of the bio a bit; it's too similar to the first sentence of the intro. (Or you can change the intro sentence)
    • The second half of the first paragraph of the bio is a little too play-by-play; maybe cut it down a bit. (Not too much, just a little)
    • In the second paragraph of the bio you use "nearby" twice in the same sentence. Please change one of them.
    • "Tarkov was curious, wanting to find out why a supposed "plant" would be making metalic sounds after Jaccob's spear hit the disguised MTT." This is a little awkward/colloquial, please rephrase.
    • In the BTS: it is unclear whether this episode, or the whole series, originally aired on March 22.
    • "...and what happened to him after his brief appearance..." "What happened to him" is a little colloquial; could it be changed?
    • Good work. Jonjedigrandmaster (Jedi Beacon) 15:19, 28 June 2009 (UTC)
      • How dare you attack the PIE. :P All of your objections are addressed, thanks for the review. Kilson Likes PIE 15:56, 28 June 09 (UTC)
  2. Attack of the Clone
    • Can you try and crop the infobox image so that it's only Tarkov? It's slightly misleading.
    • Specifically where in the DVD was Tarkov's namesake identified? Please be more specific. CC7567 (talk) 00:48, 3 July 2009 (UTC)
  3. Just a few.
    • It's almost the same as Jaccoba; this isn't a major objection, and if you're majorly opposed to it then that's alright, but couldn't you perhaps vary it a bit in relations to his son's article?
    • Did he act in a protective way to his son? That could be added to the P&T.
      • Not really, no.
    • Otherwise, good. --Darth tom Imperial Emblem (Imperial Intelligence) 20:16, 5 July 2009 (UTC)
      • Your other objection is addressed. Thanks for the reviews. Kilson Likes PIE 02:05, 17 July 09 (UTC)

Comments

  • I'm assuming that no appropriate quotes are available. CC7567 (talk) 00:48, 3 July 2009 (UTC)
    • Not really, unless you want some growls. Kilson Likes PIE 18:05, 04 July 09 (UTC)
  • Kilson, I'm sorry, but I'm going to have to hold off voting until the CW DVD has been checked; otherwise, the article won't be confirmed to have proper source coverage. If you need help doing this, let me know, but please try. CC7567 (talk) 23:55, 18 July 2009 (UTC)
    • I'm sure Kilson can handle it himself, but I can vouch that there's no new info about Tarkov in the DVD extras. MauserComlink 10:11, 22 July 2009 (UTC)

Approved as a Good article by AgriCorps 00:04, 25 July 2009 (UTC)