- The following discussion is preserved as an archive of a good article nomination that was successful. Please do not modify it.
Taris dueling ring
(+5)
Support
- Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet)
02:48, 6 October 2007 (UTC) - Graestan
(This party's over) 02:27, 9 October 2007 (UTC) - --Goodwood
(For the Rebellion!) 01:25, 11 October 2007 (UTC) - Domlith 14:49, 18 October 2007 (UTC)
- Chack Jadson (Talk) 13:11, 19 October 2007 (UTC)
Oppose
- From the Forest of Goodwood
Needs a longer introduction that covers most aspects of the article.Needs more detail in the Description subsections.Could do with a quote or two. Or three.Tense issues; I'm seeing a lot of present-tense in the article.Could use another image, too, this time of a duel, perhaps?Some minor prose issues; text redundancies, etc.- TIMMMMMBERRRRRR!--Goodwood 06:37, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
- Made introduction so its longer.
- Added some detail and more information where it could be found in the subsections.
- Fixed tense issues.
- There's still one left, at the very beginning of the History section.--Goodwood 00:12, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
- Whoops. Fixed now. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet)
18:10, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
- Whoops. Fixed now. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet)
- There's still one left, at the very beginning of the History section.--Goodwood 00:12, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
- I'll keep searching for a quote that is suitable and possibly another picture.
- Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) 22:13, 7 October 2007 (UTC)
- Added a quote and another picture, this time of the aftermath of a duel. No duel shots were able to be rendered properly.Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) 19:27, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
- Added a quote and another picture, this time of the aftermath of a duel. No duel shots were able to be rendered properly.Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet)
- From the squalid cubicle of Graestan:
Intro is not up to par; doesn't even mention the owner, or the most notable duelist. These are tips of the iceberg. Rewrite/expand. Include all important pieces of information, only leaving out minutiae.- Addressed.Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) 19:27, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
- Addressed.Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet)
Some quotes would be great. At least one. Two will shut me up.- Was adding one right as you mentioned it. I hope this one helps.
One more image/screenshot. Action? One of the duelists in the ring?- Added another image.
Drop the sources; the appearances are the same, and suffice.- Scaled back, but does this still count as fully sourced, though?
Last sentence of "Description" and first sentence of "History" say the same thing. Also, could the wording of the first sentence of "History" be changed to sound less like original research or speculation?- Addressed.
"On the other hand, sanctioned deathmatches were permitted at one point in the past. In these fights, the duelists battled to the death."—Highly redundant.- Yeah, leaving that in was not smart.
"Winnings" says some of the same things over and over. Please rewrite or kill the section, adding sentences that remain to "Duels."- Addressed, but would you prefer it be part of the duels? I personally think it fits better after addressing the gambling in the second section. My opinion, though.
- —Graestan (This party's over) 18:40, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
- I hope this addresses all of your concerns, Graestan. Thank you. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) 19:27, 8 October 2007 (UTC)
- I hope this addresses all of your concerns, Graestan. Thank you. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet)
I suggest removing the notable participants section. Most, if not all, are referenced in the article. Chack Jadson (Talk) 23:49, 12 October 2007 (UTC)- Is there a way you would suggest moving the names into the text itself? The only one two not explicitly mentioned somewhere else on the page are Ice and Twitch (the Rodian). Both of them are particularly notable in that Ice was the only known female (not that there weren't others) and Twitch was a champion. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) 17:13, 13 October 2007 (UTC)
- Maybe add their names to the intro, next to Bendak Starkiller. Chack Jadson (Talk) 19:15, 18 October 2007 (UTC)
- Addressed. I also added a mention of the most notable (Marl, Ice and Twitch) in the history section; reference to Revan defeating them. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet) 23:55, 18 October 2007 (UTC)
- Addressed. I also added a mention of the most notable (Marl, Ice and Twitch) in the history section; reference to Revan defeating them. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet)
- Maybe add their names to the intro, next to Bendak Starkiller. Chack Jadson (Talk) 19:15, 18 October 2007 (UTC)
- Is there a way you would suggest moving the names into the text itself? The only one two not explicitly mentioned somewhere else on the page are Ice and Twitch (the Rodian). Both of them are particularly notable in that Ice was the only known female (not that there weren't others) and Twitch was a champion. Master Aban Fiolli (Alpheridies University ComNet)
Comments
- Fiolli, I really like how you handled the objections. This article has a lot of potential, which is why I'm going to go ahead and vote for it. I would really like to see some expansion after this; this could become a featured article with some work. Graestan (This party's over) 02:27, 9 October 2007 (UTC)